Question

【題目】【2016江蘇鎮(zhèn)江】書(shū)面表達(dá)

假如你是陽(yáng)光中學(xué)校報(bào)英語(yǔ)專欄的小記者，上周日參加了學(xué)校為迎接世界環(huán)境日絹織的遠(yuǎn)足活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你給校報(bào)寫(xiě)一篇報(bào)道。

活動(dòng)情況	活動(dòng)地點(diǎn)	北海公園
	參與人員	七年級(jí)全體師生
	活動(dòng)內(nèi)容	上午：環(huán)保(environmental protection)演講比賽 下午：自由活動(dòng)(唱歌、游戲、放風(fēng)箏……)
┃活動(dòng)評(píng)價(jià)

要求：

1．所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容必須包括提供的所有信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。

2．文章不少于90詞，開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)。

3．語(yǔ)意通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范。

4．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名、校名等信息。

Last Sunday was a sunny day．Our school organized a hiking to greet World

Environment Day． ____________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version:

Last Sunday. was a sunny day. Our school organized a hiking to greet World Environment Day. All the Grade 7 students and teachers took part in the activity in Beihai Park.

In the morning, we had a speech competition on environmental protection. The speakers talked a lot about protecting environment, like saving water, reducing air pollution. In the afternoon, we did what we like. We sang and played games together. Some of us enjoyed flying kites. Some volunteered to pick up rubbish in the park.

It's a meaningful and exciting day. We've realized it's our duty to help protect the environment. We had a lot of fun the whole day. I hope more activities like this will be organized in our school.

【解析】

試題分析：本題是表格文字提示性作文。要求根據(jù)表格提供的信息寫(xiě)一篇報(bào)道。文章所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容是學(xué)校為迎接世界環(huán)境日組織的遠(yuǎn)足活動(dòng)，可以從活動(dòng)地點(diǎn)、參與人員、活動(dòng)內(nèi)容、活動(dòng)評(píng)價(jià)等方面入手，來(lái)敘述遠(yuǎn)足活動(dòng)的情況。注意：1．圍繞表格中的提示要點(diǎn)，加以適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮。為使行文流暢，可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用一些關(guān)聯(lián)詞語(yǔ)和使用適當(dāng)?shù)木涫剑?．本作文是記敘文體，講述的是上周的事情，故全文使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)表達(dá)；在陳述信息時(shí)，應(yīng)該使用第一人稱。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：這篇短文要點(diǎn)全面，內(nèi)容豐富，語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確，時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用正確合理。短文通過(guò)三個(gè)段落非常條理的記敘了遠(yuǎn)足活動(dòng)：首先介紹人物及地點(diǎn)，然后通過(guò)In the morning, In the afternoon,引出活動(dòng)，之后對(duì)活動(dòng)進(jìn)行評(píng)價(jià)。從短文的句式多變中可以看出作者英語(yǔ)功底非常好，如：We've realized it's our duty to help protect the environment.，I hope more activities like this will be organized in our school.等等。