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【題目】書面表達(dá)。

學(xué)校報(bào)社正在向同學(xué)們征集以My life in the future 為題的稿件，假如你是王海，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示，展開聯(lián)想，寫一篇演講稿，詞數(shù)在80詞左右。

提示：1.你未來(lái)會(huì)從事什么職業(yè)；

2.你未來(lái)的生活會(huì)是什么樣子；

3.為了實(shí)現(xiàn)未來(lái)的生活，你現(xiàn)在應(yīng)該怎么做。

注意： 文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的校名和人名。

My life in the future

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Answer 1

【答案】

Our Life in the Future

Life in the future With the development of science and technology, our life in the future will greatly be different from what it is today.

It is really interesting to imagine what our life will be like in the future. We can do almost everything at home．For example，we can log on line to read newspapers，pay telephone bills，do shopping and even see a doctor at home．To protect the environment，all cars will be powered by electricity，solar energy or wind so that we will have a tidy and green world．What’S more，people can travel in space．It will be very easy for us to visit other stars。such as the moon and the Mars．Almost any disease can be cured and people can enjoy a healthier and longer life．Besides, robots are popular in our homes and do a lot of housework for us.

A11 this can come true，I think，through our efforts．

【解析】

試題分析：試題分析：本文屬于提綱類短文，話題是“Life in the future”，文章的要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出了。寫作時(shí)不要僅僅對(duì)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行生硬的翻譯，而是要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來(lái)更充實(shí)，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文，一定要談?wù)勛约旱目捶�。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問(wèn)題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文，本文很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；應(yīng)用了較豐富的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯如differ from…不同于…，也有一些高級(jí)的句式結(jié)構(gòu)， our life in the future will greatly be different from what it is today.中的what it is today的賓語(yǔ)從句。It is really interesting to imagine what our life will be like in the future.中的it作為形式主語(yǔ)。連詞Besides等的使用也很合適，用詞準(zhǔn)確、句子通順、行文連貫。