Question

【題目】書面表達 10分

根據(jù)以下提示，寫一篇80詞左右的短文。 開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

1. Mary是印度一個貧困家庭的孩子。

2. 過去他們家太窮了，他沒錢上學，只好在農(nóng)場干活。每天早起晚歸，十分辛苦。

3. 他多么希望自己能夠上學�。∮幸惶�， 一位UNICEF的工作人員來到他的村莊，了解了他家的情況后，給他提供了上學的錢。

4. Mary 現(xiàn)在在校讀書， 他長大后也想成為一位UNICEF的工作人員，幫助更多貧困的孩子。

Mary is a child from a poor family in India.

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version：

Mary is a child from a poor family in India.

. His family were very poor in the past, and she had no money to go to school. So she had to work on the farm all day, she could neither read nor write. She wished she could go to school! One day , a staff of the UNCIFE came to her village. After learning about her condition, the staff gave her money and afforded her to go to school. Now Mandeep studies at school, and she can read and write. She wants to be a staff of theUNCIFE when she grows up, and help more poor children.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，介紹Mary在UNCIFE的工作人員的資助下會讀也會寫的故事。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般過去時和一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱為第三人稱，注意主謂一致問題，比如：Lisa is....；They were...；she had to ....；the staff gave....；She wants to...等句式的應用。寫作中注意運用代詞，注意多種句式交替運用。寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要把提綱的內(nèi)容表達完整。

寫作亮點：本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語言簡練。開頭介紹了Mary的過去，接下來介紹在UNCIFE的工作人員的資助下，她能去上學，最后指出她希望長大后，幫助更多的貧窮孩子。此處用了 in the past，all day, learning about，afforded her to ，wants to 等這些詞組的運用也讓文章增色不少。