Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)（20分）

假如你是李明，上周你班同學(xué)就”畢業(yè)前我們該為學(xué)校做些什么?”進(jìn)行了激烈的討論。請你根據(jù)下表提示，將同學(xué)們的建議用英語寫一封信告訴你的筆友David，并談?wù)勀愕南敕�及理由�?/span>

一些同學(xué)建議	全班籌錢（raise money），為校圖書館買書或其他東西 (raise our pocket money to buy some books for our school library)
另外一些同學(xué)建議	無需花錢；好好學(xué)習(xí)，讓學(xué)校以我們?yōu)闃s（be proud of）
你的想法及理由（in my opinion）	Help other students, buy some story books and English novels……

注意:

1.詞數(shù)不少于80，信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

2.要點(diǎn)完整、層次清楚、語法正確、上下文連貫；

3.信中不得使用真實(shí)的人名、校名。

Dear David,

Last week we held a discussion on what we should do for our school before we graduate(畢業(yè)). The students in our class have different suggestions.

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I’d like to know your idea. Could you give me some advice?

Best wishes,

Li Ming

Answer 1

【答案】

Last week we held a discussion on what we should do for our school before we graduate. The students in our class have different suggestions.

Some students think that we can raise money to buy some books for the school library or something else for the school. Other students think it’s not necessary to spend money. We can study hard and make our school feel proud of us.

In my opinion, we don’t have to spend money. We can do something meaningful things. For example, we can do some volunteer work to make our school more beautiful or try to get better results in the coming exams so that our school will be proud of us.

(In my opinion, we can raise our pocket money to buy some books for our school library. We can buy some story books and English novels. They don’t cost much but they are useful. The younger students will like them. I hope every student in our school can do so. )

I’d like to know your idea. Could you give me some advice?

Best wishes!

Li Ming

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)所給信息，來介紹一些同學(xué)、另外一些同學(xué)和自己的觀點(diǎn)。題目中有關(guān)于一些同學(xué)，另一些同學(xué)的觀點(diǎn)，我們應(yīng)用正確的英語將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來。這些信息包括:“全班籌錢，為校圖書館買書或其他東西，無需花錢；好好學(xué)習(xí)，讓學(xué)校以我們?yōu)闃s”寫作時(shí)，我們可以根據(jù)需要將這些信息進(jìn)行重新整理和安排，使文章的意思銜接更自然。我們要盡量使用一些好的句型和連詞，使文章上下文意思連貫，更出彩。而且，一定記得談?wù)勛约旱挠^點(diǎn)。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇非常優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者按照題目的要求，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，要點(diǎn)全面。而且作者在寫作時(shí)，并不是完全按照題目中給出的順序，逐句翻譯的，而是將這些信息進(jìn)行了整合，讓意思關(guān)聯(lián)緊密的放在一起表達(dá)，這一點(diǎn)很好。短文中的語言合乎英語的表達(dá)規(guī)范，而且作者還使用了一些較好的句式，增強(qiáng)了文章的連貫性。如suggest not to do動(dòng)詞不定式的否定用法。短語be proud of以... ...自豪等。