Question

進來中國人都在說中國夢，假如你是一個無錫中學生，你叫Gao Fei, 來自湖北，目睹了無錫最近幾年的發(fā)展和變化，有喜有憂。于是你給政府有關部門發(fā)了一份e-mail，說說自己對未來的一些夢想，內容要點如下：
1. 最近幾年無錫發(fā)展很快；比如，道路變寬了；城里可供人們休閑的場所也多了；這里的人們過著幸福的生活；
2. 但是還存在一些嚴重的問題：房價太高，許多人根本買不起房子；因為工業(yè)的發(fā)展，水和空氣被嚴重污染；人們很難呼吸到新鮮空氣。
我的夢想：……
注意1.短文須包括所有內容要點，要求語句通順，意思連貫；
2. 第3要點作2-3句話的適當發(fā)揮；
3. E-mail的開頭已給出，不計入總詞數。
4. 詞數：80個詞左右。
Dear Sir or Madam,
How are you? It’s my great pleasure to write this e-mail to you. Recently，people in China have been talking about Chinese Dream. I also have my own dream and Iwould like to share it with others.
My name is Gao Fei. I’m a middle school student. I moved to Wuxi with my parents five years ago because my parents found work here.
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Yours sincerely,
Gao Fei

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam,
How are you? It’s my great pleasure to write this e-mail to you. Recently，people in China have been talking about Chinese Dream. I also have my own dream and I like to share it with others.
My name is Gao Fei. I’m a middle school student. I moved to Wuxi with my parents five years ago because my parents found work here.
Wuxi has developed quickly in the last few years. For example, the roads become wide. There are many places for people to relax. The people here are living a happy life.
     But there are still some problems. The prices of the houses are too high. Many people can’t afford to buy them at all. Water and air are badly polluted. It is difficult for people to breathe fresh air.
     My dream is that people in Wuxi can enjoy clearer blue sky , more beautifule Taihu lake and that every family can own a nice comfortable home in the future .
Yours sincerely,
Gao Fei

解析試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，要求寫一篇介紹夢想的短文。本題給出的材料較為簡略，動筆前應先認真閱讀材料，圍繞所給材料組織內容，確定主要短語，句式等問題。通過閱讀材料可知這篇短文主要使用的人稱就是第一人稱，時態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，這方面需要注意的問題比較少。動筆前可以按照材料內容列出簡單提綱，寫出關鍵單詞。寫作中注意語義通順，符合邏輯關系。上下文之間可以適當使用連接詞。
考點：提綱類作文
點評：做英語書面表達時，要注意認真審題，分析體裁，確定時態(tài)；分析內容要點，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達的條理性，用好連接詞。最后，注意不要犯語法、句法以及搭配性錯誤，寫好后多讀多修改，我想一定會寫出滿意的文章來。