Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

浙江衛(wèi)視“中國夢想秀”播出了一個殘疾女孩的故事。請根據(jù)下列提示，講述她的故事和你的感受。

要求：

1、參考提示語，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

2、語句通順、意思連貫、書寫工整；

3、文中不得出現(xiàn)你本人的姓名、所在學(xué)校名稱；

4、不少于80詞（開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)）。

Yang Pei is a disabled girl who is well-known because of the “Dream Show” on Zhejiang TV. __________________________________________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

Yang Pei is a disabled girl who is well-known because of the “Dream Show” on Zhejiang TV. She is twenty-five years old and she is from Shanxi. When she was young, a terrible accident happened to her. And she lost both her arms after that. So she never went to school. She was very sad. But she always thought she should be a useful person. So she learned to do things with her feet. Now she can look after herself and make a living by herself.

We are very healthy and strong. Let’s learn from Yang Pei. Whatever happens to us, we should never give up.

【解析】

試題分析：本題是一篇話題作文。首先要仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)。提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。本題要求介紹主人翁的個人信息、過去的經(jīng)歷及現(xiàn)在的情況。短文用第三人稱，一般過去及一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本范文包含了圖表提示的所有信息，并作了恰當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮。短文語句通順、意思連貫、時態(tài)準(zhǔn)確。文中運(yùn)用了時間狀語從句，賓語從句，使短文表達(dá)更生動。用了and, so, when等等連詞，使短文更加緊湊，讀起來朗朗上口。短文第二段，語言簡捷，中心突出，言簡意賅。