Question

7．生活中有很多感人的人或事，如"2016感動中國"中為了使命，執(zhí)著于千百次實驗的屠呦呦，化作光明燭的莫振高等等．相信你在生活中也做了一些事感動了別人，請以I moved        為題介紹一下你做了何事，感動了何人．
要求：1在題目空格處填入你要描述的對象，如我的父母、我的老師、我的同桌等；
2文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
380詞左右．
I moved                                                   ．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文，根據(jù)所給要求，先補(bǔ)全作文題目，再圍繞話題，寫一篇語意完整，語法正確，表達(dá)流暢的短文．寫作時，不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱，80詞左右．注意適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．可以采用以下句型：
高分句型一：I am the apple of their eyes．我是他們的掌上明珠．
高分句型二：My parents were glad to see it and were moved by my action．（我父母看到此很高興，被我的行動感動了．）

解答 I moved my parents．
  I am the only child in my family，so my parents love me very much．I am the apple of their eyes．（掌上明珠）（高分句型一） I become a naughty（淘氣的） and lazy boy．I dislike doing anything but play computer games．My parents are worried about me．They always try their best to change me．At my heart，I want to change myself and become a good boy．（這一段主要介紹我自己的行為．）
  Last week，I learned how to cook fish at school．I decided to cook it for my parents on the weekend．I went shopping for a fish．I cleaned up the fish and cooked it alone at home before my parents came back．When they returned，I had cooked it well．It smelled very delicious．My parents were glad to see it and were moved by my action．（高分句型二）They say I will become a good boy again．（這一段主要列舉事例，來介紹自己的改變，并且感動了我的父母．）

點評 本題是考查書面表達(dá)能力，在平時的學(xué)習(xí)中要加強(qiáng)寫的訓(xùn)練，寫作時要做到字跡工整，卷面整潔，語言流暢要把文中的要點寫全，做到語句通順，過渡自然連貫