Question

每個人都擁有夢想，而實現(xiàn)夢想需要行動。請你根據(jù)所給圖片寫一篇題為“Take action to realize our dreams”的英語短文。你的短文應包括以下內容:
(1) 描述圖片內容，如情景、人物(Frank)、動作等；并簡要表達你的觀點；
(2) 談談你的夢想，及如何實現(xiàn)。

注意：
(1) 詞數(shù)90左右，短文首段已經給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
(2) 文中不得提及考生所在學校及自己的姓名。
Take action to realize our dreams
All of ue have dreams, but how can we realize our dreams?
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               

Answer 1

Take action to realize our dreams
All of us have dreams, but how can we realize our dreams?
From the pictures, we know that Frank dreamed to become a doctor when he was 15 years old. However, 45 years later he still dreams to be a doctor lying in bed. It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions. It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions I also have a dream. I wish to work as an engineer when I grow up. I will study hard every day and improve my abilities to get ready for my future job, so that I can make my dream come true. 

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)圖片，寫一篇命題作文，題目為Take action to realize our dreams。為實現(xiàn)夢想而采取行動。通過審題可知，這篇作文應主要有兩個方面的內容，一是要把圖片中的人物、事件表達清楚，并且有自己對這件事情的看法。所以這就要求我們要仔細觀察圖片，弄清楚圖片主要想告訴我們什么，并用英語表達出來；另一方面是談談自己的夢想，以及如何實現(xiàn)夢想，這一部分是開放性的，可自由發(fā)揮。寫好這篇作文的關鍵是要體現(xiàn)文章的中心，即想要實現(xiàn)夢想，必須要行動起來，空想是不行的。寫作時要注意語意連貫，表達流暢。
【亮點說明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文。這篇作文的結構主要分為三個部分。開頭用一句話提出了問題，這是題目中給好的開頭，我們要順著這個話題向下說；第二部分描寫了圖片中的內容，表達很準確，很切題，說出了關鍵所在；第三部分表達了自己的夢想，以及如何實現(xiàn)這個夢想。整個文章的意思還是很連貫的，表達的也比較流暢。有簡單句，也有復合句。文章中的好的句型有we know that Frank dreamed to become a doctor when he was 15 years old、It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions、It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions、I will study hard every day and improve my abilities to get ready for my future job, so that I can make my dream come true.等。