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16．眾所周知，控制情緒，保持積極樂觀的心態(tài)，才能讓生活充滿幸福和快樂．那么如何讓自己幸�？鞓纺兀勘酒谟⒄Z黑板報(bào)的"Think and Write"欄目的征稿話題就是"Learn to Control Your Feelings"．請結(jié)合表格中的提示，寫下你的感悟與大家一起分享吧．

The importance of controlling feelings	Controlling feelings is important．
	We can find better ways to solve the problem．
	Controlling feelings can help to make friends with more people．
	Bad feelings can cause some trouble．

注意：1．詞數(shù)80左右．        2．可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，以使行文連貫．
3．短文開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Learn  to  Control  Your  Feelings
Nobody can be happy all the time．If something badhappens to you，what will you do？Will you get angry？
Ithink at that time you should control your feelings．Controlling feelings isimportant to us all．If we control our feelings well，we can find what causedthe problem and then we can find better ways to solve the problem．Alsocontrolling feelings can help us to make friends with more people．Bad feelingscan make you lose friends and cause you some trouble．So we should learn tocontrol our feelings and make our life happier．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是以"Learn to Control Your Feelings"為題寫下你對如何控制情緒的感悟與大家一起分享．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．控制情緒是重要的；
2．找到更好的方式去解決問題；
3．控制情緒能幫助交到更多的朋友
4．壞情緒能引起一些麻煩．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
help sb to do sth  幫助某人做某事
make friends 交朋友
make sb do sth 讓某人做某事
make …adj 讓…怎么樣
【高分句型】
1．I think at that time you should control your feelings．
think后省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語從句
2．①If we control our feelings well，we can find ②what caused the problem and then we can find better ways ③to solve the problem．
①if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句，主句含有情態(tài)動(dòng)詞can，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)代替一般將來時(shí)．
②find后是what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句．
③動(dòng)詞不定式做后置定語，修飾先行詞ways．
3．Also ①controlling feelings can②help us to make friends with more people．
①動(dòng)名詞短語作主語．
②help sb to do sth  幫助某人做某事
③make friends 交朋友

解答 Learn to Control Feelings
   Nobody can be happy all the time．If something bad happens to you，what will you do？Will you get angry？
   I think at that time you should control your feelings．【高分句型】Controlling feelings is important to us all．（控制情緒是重要的）If we control our feelings well，we can find what caused the problem and then we can find better ways to solve the problem．【高分句型】（找到更好的方式去解決問題）Also controlling feelings can help us to make friends with more people．【高分句型】（控制情緒能幫助交到更多的朋友）Bad feelings can make you lose friends and cause you some trouble．（壞情緒能引起一些麻煩）So we should learn to control our feelings and make our life happier．

點(diǎn)評 考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示認(rèn)真審題，確定文章的中心．注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)．本文主要應(yīng)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，所以在寫作時(shí)，要尤其一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)及情態(tài)動(dòng)詞的表達(dá)方式．聯(lián)系實(shí)際，例舉控制情緒的好處，建議人們學(xué)會(huì)控制自己的感情．同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．溫馨提醒：考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等．
這篇短文使用了一些過渡詞，and then，also，So為文章增色不少．寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)運(yùn)用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理．