Question

14．2015年的體育中考剛剛落下帷幕，雖然長(zhǎng)跑是你的弱項(xiàng)，但經(jīng)過努力和同學(xué)的幫助，你在測(cè)試
中獲得了滿分．為了分享你的經(jīng)驗(yàn)并展望未來(lái)，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下圖示，寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文向英語(yǔ)報(bào)投稿．
注：1、文章必須包括圖示內(nèi)容，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
 2、注意連接詞和過渡語(yǔ)的運(yùn)用．
3、詞數(shù)不少于80詞．短文首句僅供選擇使用，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．

I can't believe that I have got full mark in the long-distance race test．Believe it or not，I was afraid of running before．I thought it was too tiring．However，my friends encouraged me not to give up．And they often practiced running together with me．With their help，I made great progress．It helped me build up my confidence．As a result，I made it．
It is clear to everybody that the only way to make one's dream come true is to work hard．Just as the old saying goes"No pain，no gain．"In my opinion，if we put our heart into our study and help each other，we will get good results in the following exams or even anything we do．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖畫作文．內(nèi)容是向英語(yǔ)報(bào)投稿分享你體育中考得滿分的經(jīng)驗(yàn)并展望未來(lái)，時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．體育中考得滿分經(jīng)過；之前害怕，在某人的幫助下，不放棄，最后成功了
2．經(jīng)驗(yàn)和展望未來(lái)；堅(jiān)持努力，取的好成績(jī)
 
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
believe it or not 信不信由你
be afraid of doing sth 害怕做某事
encourage sb to do sth 鼓勵(lì)某人做某事
practice doing sth 鍛煉做某事
with one's help 在某人的幫助下
make progress 取得進(jìn)步
make it 成功

【高分句型】
1．①It is clear to everybody that the only way②to make one's dream come true is③to work hard．
①it作為形式主語(yǔ)，that從句作為真正主語(yǔ)．
②動(dòng)詞不定式做為后置定語(yǔ)，修飾前面的way．come true實(shí)現(xiàn)．
③動(dòng)詞不定式做為表語(yǔ)，與is構(gòu)成系表結(jié)構(gòu)．
2．Just as the old saying goes"No pain，no gain．"
No pain，no gain不勞無(wú)獲，諺語(yǔ)的使用．
3．①In my opinion，②if we put our heart into our study and help each other，we will get good results in the following exams or even anything ③we do．
①In my opinion依我看來(lái)
②if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，遵循主將從現(xiàn)的規(guī)則．
③省略了關(guān)系詞that的定語(yǔ)從句，修飾先行詞thing，關(guān)系詞that作為賓語(yǔ)，故省略．

解答 I can't believe that I have got full mark in the long-distance race test． Believe it or not，I was afraid of running before．I thought it was too tiring．However，my friends encouraged me not to give up．And they often practiced running together with me．With their help，I made great progress．It helped me build up my confidence．As a result，I made it．（體育中考得滿分經(jīng)過）
It is clear to everybody that the only way to make one's dream come true is to work hard．【高分句型】Just as the old saying goes"No pain，no gain．"【高分句型】In my opinion，if we put our heart into our study and help each other，we will get good results in the following exams or even anything we do．【高分句型】（經(jīng)驗(yàn)和展望未來(lái)）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這篇短文涵蓋了圖畫包含的所有要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，意思連貫，符合邏輯．在文章的結(jié)構(gòu)組織上很好地使用了簡(jiǎn)單句和復(fù)合句，文章脈絡(luò)清晰、自然流暢．同時(shí)，使用了一些常用的句式和短語(yǔ)，這為文章增色不少．在學(xué)習(xí)中注意積累，背誦一些常用句式及短語(yǔ)，寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理．