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14．暑假馬上就要到了，天氣炎熱，同學們都喜歡去游泳，請根據(jù)所給提示寫一篇80詞左右的英語短文．文章開頭已給出，但不計入總字數(shù)．
1．安全是首要的，我們必須記住安全守則；
2．不要單獨去游泳，應該和大人一起去；
3．不要到河里或者池塘去游泳，游泳池是最好的游泳的地方；
4．不要急著跳進游泳池，游泳前你應該鍛煉一下；
5．如果你看到別人在游泳池遇到危險，應該向大人求助，因為你太小了不能去救別人．
注意：1、可適當增減內容，使短文意思完整、連貫；
2、書寫規(guī)范，文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和校名；
3、參考詞匯：安全守則 safety rule；池塘pond
The Swimming Safety Rules
Summer vacation is coming，it is very hot．The kids like swimming．                   

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
Then，do not hurry to into the swimming pool，you had better do some exercise before swimming不要急著跳進游泳池，游泳前你應該鍛煉一下
had better do sth 最好做某事，
【高分句型二】
①Last but not least，②if you see others ③who are in dangerous，you should ask others for help，④because you are⑤too young to save others最后也是最重要的，如果你看到別人在游泳池遇到危險，應該向大人求助，因為你太小了不能去救別人．
①Last but not least最后也是最重要的
②if引導的條件狀語從句．
③who作為關系詞的定語從句，修飾前面的others．
④because引導的原因狀語從句．
⑤too…to do sth 太…而不能做某事

解答 The Swimming Safely Rules
Summer vacationg is coming，it is very hot，the kids like swimming，incouiding me．my favorite sports is swimming．But swimming alony is very dagerous．there are some rules we should have to do．
At first，safety is important．we should memorizre the swimming safes rules．（安全是首要的，我們必須記住安全守則）
Next，do not go swimming alone，you should go swiming with adulds，Becauce swimming alone is very dangeruos．（不要單獨去游泳，應該和大人一起去；）
Third，we shouldn't swim in the river or pool，The swimming pool is the best place．（不要到河里或者池塘去游泳，游泳池是最好的游泳的地方；）
Then，do not hurry to into the swimming pool，you had better do some exercise before swimming．【高分句型一】（不要急著跳進游泳池，游泳前你應該鍛煉一下）
The last but not least，if you see others who are  in dangerous，you should ask others for help，beacause you are too young to save others．【高分句型二】（如果你看到別人在游泳池遇到危險，應該向大人求助，因為你太小了不能去救別人．）

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