Question

書面表達(dá)
近來，全國正在進(jìn)行平安校園建設(shè)，我市也不例外。作為一名學(xué)生，我們更應(yīng)該珍惜自己的生命，更應(yīng)該注意自己的人身安全。假如你是Daming，并擔(dān)任校學(xué)生會(huì)主席，請你就安全問題，向全校學(xué)生發(fā)出倡議，寫一封安全倡議書。
內(nèi)容提示：
（1）不帶管制刀具到學(xué)校；
（2）不私自下河洗澡；
（3）不打架；
（4）上學(xué)放學(xué)的途中應(yīng)該注意安全；
（5）遇緊急情況，立即報(bào)告警察或老師。
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參考詞匯：管制刀具：restricted knives or things；洗澡：have a bath；打架：fight；緊急情況：emergency；交通安全：pay attention to the traffic。
寫作要求：（1）用詞恰當(dāng)，要點(diǎn)全面，層次清晰，書寫規(guī)范。
（2）可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，80詞左右，開頭、結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
（3）嚴(yán)禁出現(xiàn)自己的真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校等相關(guān)信息。
Dear students,
As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should _____________________________________________________________________
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Yours,
Daming

Answer 1

Dear students,
As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should try our best to make sure we are safe. We mustn’t bring restricted knives or things to our school because these things may cause serious problems. Do not have a bath in rivers or ponds by ourselves without our parents permission. And, we should be friendly to others so fighting is strongly banned. Make sure that we should always pay attention to the traffic on our way to school or home. Furthermore, if we meet some emergency, we must call for help from the police or our teachers. In a word, following these safety rules above can make us live in peace.
Yours,
Daming    

試題分析：本文的寫作開門見山對文章直接描寫我們應(yīng)該采取的措施，不允許帶管制刀具mustn’t bring restricted knives or things，不要未經(jīng)允許下河游泳Do not have a bath in rivers or ponds by ourselves without our parents permission.同時(shí)我們對別人要友好，不要打架we should be friendly to others so fighting is strongly banned. 上學(xué)放學(xué)的途中應(yīng)該注意安全Make sure that we should always pay attention to the traffic on our way to school or home.遇緊急情況，立即報(bào)告警察或老師if we meet some emergency, we must call for help from the police or our teachers.最后用一句話對文章進(jìn)行總結(jié)In a word, following these safety rules above can make us live in peace.
點(diǎn)評：初中英語的作文，著重考察學(xué)生連詞成句的能力，要在“準(zhǔn)”字上下功夫。在寫作中注意人稱與謂語動(dòng)詞的數(shù)關(guān)系和動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)等諸多方面。在對所出現(xiàn)的問題或是采取的措施描寫中注意使用連詞或是好的句式如have a  far-reaching effect on sth對…有深遠(yuǎn)的影響，only 置于句首的倒裝及only when …,can we…等。對于中學(xué)作文的寫作，盡量將所學(xué)的知識(shí)運(yùn)用到作文中，寫出富于變化、結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊的文章，不要出現(xiàn)中式英文。在平時(shí)的練習(xí)中，注意多背誦范文，對于寫的好的句子進(jìn)行默寫，考試時(shí)就能寫出準(zhǔn)確地道的作文。