Question

20．根據(jù)下表所列內(nèi)容，寫(xiě)一篇文章介紹你的筆友張平，并根據(jù)他的困惑給他提一些建議．要點(diǎn)表達(dá)要全，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．字?jǐn)?shù)100字左右．

	出生日期	1997年8月23日
基本	星座	Virgo
情況	個(gè)性	謙虛，實(shí)事求是，注重細(xì)節(jié)．
	愛(ài)好	酷愛(ài)足球，熱愛(ài)大自然，加入Birdwatching Club兩年了
	學(xué)習(xí)	作業(yè)多，想考高分，壓力大．
困惑	情感	父母整天忙于工作，不時(shí)感到孤獨(dú)．
	穿白色衣服，因?yàn)椤?/TD>
建議	使用黃色文具復(fù)習(xí)迎考，因?yàn)椤?/TD>
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Zhang Ping is my pen friend．HeZhang Ping is my pen friend．He was born on August 23，1997．He is a Virgo．Zhang Ping is a modest person．He's practical and pays attention to details．He has many hobbies．He is crazy about playing football．He also loves nature．He has been in the Birdwatching Club for 2 years．However，as a Grade 9 student，he has some problems．He has too much homework to do．He feels stressed because he wants to get high marks in exams．What's more，his parents are busy working all day and have no time for him，so he feels lonely from time to time．
I want to offer Zhang Ping some advice．When he feels stressed，he should wear white，because white can make him feel calm and peaceful．When he study for exams，he can use yellow stationery，because yellow is the colour of wisdom．When he feels lonely，he can have communication with his family or friends and share his worries with them．I hope my advice will be of great value to him
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Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
He feels stressed because he wants to get high marks in exams他感覺(jué)有壓力因?yàn)樗�想要考試的時(shí)候獲得高分．
because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句．
【高分句型二】
When he feels lonely，he can have communication with his family or friends and share his worries with them當(dāng)他感覺(jué)孤獨(dú)的時(shí)候，他能和朋友家人溝通，和他分擔(dān)憂愁．
when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Zhang Ping is my pen friend．He was born on August 23，1997．He is a Virgo．Zhang Ping is a modest person．He's practical and pays attention to details．He has many hobbies．He is crazy about playing football．He also loves nature．He has been in the Birdwatching Club for 2 years（基本情況）．However，as a Grade 9 student，he has some problems．He has too much homework to do．He feels stressed because he wants to get high marks in exams．【高分句型一】What's more，his parents are busy working all day and have no time for him，so he feels lonely from time to time．（困惑）
    I want to offer Zhang Ping some advice．When he feels stressed，he should wear white，because white can make him feel calm and peaceful．When he study for exams，he can use yellow stationery，because yellow is the colour of wisdom．When he feels lonely，he can have communication with his family or friends and share his worries with them．【高分句型二】I hope my advice will be of great value to him．（建議）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較簡(jiǎn)略，動(dòng)筆前先要圍繞這些要點(diǎn)阻止材料，確定寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，注意將這些要點(diǎn)全部表達(dá)出來(lái)，不要偏離文章中心．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合文章要表達(dá)的主題，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問(wèn)題．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．