Question

【題目】根據(jù)下表提示以My friend 為題寫一篇短文。

基本情況	Millie，12歲，英國人，短發(fā)，大眼睛，高而苗條 陽光中學(xué)七年級一班學(xué)生
學(xué)習情況	最喜歡的學(xué)科是數(shù)學(xué) 經(jīng)常幫助同學(xué)學(xué)習
生活方式	經(jīng)常吃漢堡、雞肉和巧克力，但很少吃蔬菜和水果 她兩頓飯之間還吃甜食，很少運動 需要改變生活方式的時候了
興趣愛好	喜歡踢足球，聽音樂，是讀書俱樂部的一員 最喜歡圣誕節(jié)，可以和家人朋友聚會，還可以收到許多禮物

要求:1.語法正確，意思連貫，書寫規(guī)范，要點齊全，發(fā)揮想象，適當拓展。

2. 80個詞左右。(開頭已給出，不計入詞數(shù))

My friend

I have a good friend. Her name is Millie.

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Answer 1

【答案】I have a good friend. Her name is Millie. She is 12 years old. She is in Class One Grade Seven in Yangguang Middle School. She is from England. She is tall and slim with short hair and two big eyes. Her favorite subject is maths, and she often helps other students with their maths. She likes burgers, chicken and chocolate, but she seldom eat vegetables and fruits. She likes to eats some desserts between two meals, but she doesn’t do enough exercise. I think it’s time to change her life style. She likes to play football and listen to music, and she is a member of the reading club. She likes Christmas, because she can get together with her family and friends and receive many gifts. This is my friend, do you like her?

【解析】

這是一篇話題作文, 并且已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點, 所以首先閱讀所給要點,圍繞要點適當發(fā)揮. 寫作中要注意描述要全面, 包含提示中所給內(nèi)容. 結(jié)合材料可知,本文需要用第三人稱, 時態(tài)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時。本篇作文首先用I have a good friend. Her name is Millie.開篇點題，指出誰是我最好的朋友，接著按照內(nèi)容提示依次描述她的長相，習慣，愛好等。寫作連點：She is tall and slim with short hair and two big eyes.介詞短語作定語，使零散的句子連在了一起，短語help sb with sth及句型it’s time to do sth 的使用恰到好處。連詞and, but, because的使用使文章不失連貫性。時態(tài)及人稱使用正確。最后以This is my friend, do you like her?對此文章進行總結(jié)，是很完整的一篇文章。