Question

【題目】初級寫作：

臨近畢業(yè)，學(xué)校在學(xué)習(xí)小組內(nèi)開展了初中階段自評和組評活動，假設(shè)你是Rainbow小組的組長Zhang Hong,請你為你的組員Li Ming 進(jìn)行綜合素質(zhì)的評價(jià)，寫一份素質(zhì)報(bào)告。

內(nèi)容包括：1、他的愛好；

2、他的優(yōu)點(diǎn)(兩條)；

3、他的缺點(diǎn)或存在的問題；

4、你對他的建議(兩條)。

要求：1. 表達(dá)清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

2. 要點(diǎn)必須包括所有相關(guān)信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)班級、姓名等；

3. 詞數(shù)：不少于80 詞 (所給內(nèi)容不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))。

Li Ming is a member of my team called Rainbow.

Answer 1

【答案】Li Ming is a member of my team called Rainbow. Generally speaking, he is a warm-hearted and outgoing boy. He is always ready to help others without asking for anything in return. He can also get on well with teachers and classmates. In his spare time, he likes reading books on history, so he knows a lot of knowledge about history.

But as a famous saying goes “Every coin has two sides”, sometimes he doesn’t work hard enough on his lessons. I advise him to spend more time on the subjects from now on. What’s more, he’d better answer questions in class actively so that he can make great progress.

I’m sure if he can try harder to improve himself. He’ll be an excellent student soon.

【解析】

這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少，如a member of，warm-hearted and outgoing，be ready to do，help others，ask for，in return，get on well with，a lot of，advise sb. to do，spend more time on sth.，from now on，so that，make great progress等。而非謂語動詞結(jié)構(gòu)He is always ready to help others without asking for anything in return.和In his spare time, he likes reading books on history, so he knows a lot of knowledge about history./ What’s more, he’d better answer questions in class actively so that he can make great progress./ I’m sure if he can try harder to improve himself.等復(fù)雜從句結(jié)構(gòu)的運(yùn)用，豐富了短文內(nèi)容，使表達(dá)多樣化，是本文的亮點(diǎn)。在學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章表達(dá)更有邏輯性，也更富有條理。