Question

假如你是第二中學(xué)的一名初三學(xué)生劉紅，你要寫一封信給青少年專家Sigmund Friend，告訴他你遇到的問(wèn)題，并請(qǐng)求幫助。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列表格中所列的信息，寫完這封信。

姓 名	劉 紅
星座 愛(ài)好	Gemini, (curious, outgoing) 聽(tīng)音樂(lè)，看動(dòng)作片，偶像是成龍
最喜愛(ài)的顏色	green (energetic, new life), orange (joy, success)
存在問(wèn)題	父母管得很緊，幾乎不給時(shí)間玩； 迷戀上網(wǎng)聊天，經(jīng)常晚回家，不能準(zhǔn)時(shí)交作業(yè)；學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)?cè)絹?lái)越差，父母要求你放棄上網(wǎng)，為此很苦惱。

注意： 
1. 詞數(shù)90詞左右。信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。 
2. 信中須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，不要逐詞翻譯，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫，符合邏輯。
Dear Sigmund Friend, 
My name is Liu Hong. I’m a Grade 9 student in No. 2 Middle School. I am curious and outgoing,my star is Gemini. My favourite hobbies are listening to music and watching action movies. My idol is Jacky Chen.  I like green and orange best because green stands for energetic and new life and orange for joy and success.
But now I need your help. My parents are so strict with me that I have no time to play. I am crazy about chatting on internet,so I often go home late,，in that case I can’t hand in my homework on time. Because my scores become worse and worse ,my parents ask me to give up surf on the internet.I am very upset. Please give me some advice.
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Can you give me some useful advice? I hope to hear from you soon.
Best wishes! 
Yours,
Liu Hong 

Answer 1

Dear Sigmund Friend, 
My name is Liu Hong. I’m a Grade 9 student in No. 2 Middle School. I am Gemini.I’m curious and outgoing.My favourite hobbies are listening to music and watching action movies. My idol is Jacky Chen. I like green and orange best because green stands for energetic and new life and orange for joy and success.
But now I need your help. My parents are so strict with me that I have no time to play. I am crazy about chatting on the internet,so I often go home late,，in that case I can’t hand in my homework on time. Because my scores become worse and worse ,my parents ask me to give up surf net.I am very upset. Can you give me some useful advice? I hope to hear from you soon.
Best wishes! 
Yours,
Liu Hong 

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文作者先寫自己的個(gè)人情況，包括所在學(xué)校、星座、性格、愛(ài)好，然后寫自己的煩惱，最后請(qǐng)求幫助。全文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，例如listen to ，stands for，be strict with,be crazy about,on the internet，in that case， hand in， on time，worse and worse，give up，surf net，等短語(yǔ)，文中還用到了狀語(yǔ)從句because green stands for energetic and new life and orange for joy and success.My parents are so strict with me that I have no time to play.so I often go home late,in that case I can’t hand in my homework on time. Because my scores become worse and worse.文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。