Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)（滿分10分）

請你以 “A trip to...”為題寫一篇短文，介紹自己印象最深的一次旅游。文章需涉及到以下信息：Time, place, people, what you saw, what you did and your feeling.

注意：

1、文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

2、語言通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范；

3、詞數(shù)80左右。

A trip to

Answer 1

【答案】

A trip to Beijing

Last year, I visited Beijing. I always looked forward to visiting there. So I was so excited that I couldn’t fall asleep on the night before I started. I got up early and packed my backpack for the journey. It took me five hours to get there by train. I went to the Great Wall and saw many people there. The Great Wall is very long. Though I was very tired, I was very happy. I also went to the Tian’an Men Square. It is very big. I was very excited because I have learned a lot about the city.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們記敘自己的一次旅行，是一篇話題作文，具體的內(nèi)容需要我們自己來組織。我們的短文中應(yīng)包括以下內(nèi)容：首先是你去了哪里，在那里做了些什么，看到了什么；其次還應(yīng)該有你對這次旅行的感受。通過分析可知，這篇短文記敘的是你過去的一次經(jīng)歷，故整篇短文應(yīng)使用一般過去時(shí)態(tài)，第一人稱來敘述。我們要特別注意每句話中謂語動詞形式的變化，都要用過去式形式，尤其要注意一些不規(guī)則動詞的形式變化。寫作時(shí)，我們可以使用一些好的句型和短語，使文章的表達(dá)更加流暢。

【寫作亮點(diǎn)】這是一篇偶像的作文，短文中作者給我們記敘了他去北京的一次旅行，短文中告訴了我們作者什么時(shí)候去的，他都去了哪些地方，在那些地方都做了些什么事。另外作者還對這次旅行發(fā)表了自己的感受。整篇短文的敘述非常完整，語句也很流暢，符合英語的表達(dá)規(guī)范。短文中作者使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)，注意了動詞過去式形式的變化。短文中一些較好的短語和句型有：I always looked forward to visiting there、So I was so excited that I couldn’t fall asleep on the night before I started.、It took me five hours to get there by train、though I was very tired, I was very happy、I was very excited because I have learned a lot about the city等。