Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)(15分)

你校的美籍學(xué)生Mary剛來(lái)到杭州。她在校園網(wǎng)論壇上發(fā)了一個(gè)帖子，說(shuō)她很孤獨(dú)。假如你是李明，看到她的帖子，請(qǐng)寫一個(gè)回帖。首先作自我介紹，然后提出建議，并說(shuō)明你將如何幫助她。

要求： 1. 寫出自己的信息

2. 寫出你的建議及如何幫助她。

3.字?jǐn)?shù)：80個(gè)

About yourself	Li Ming, Class3, Grade 8, like meeting people
Suggestions	Make friends, talk with, read books, listen to
How to help her	…….

Hi Mary,

I’m Li Ming from Class 3, Grade 8.

Answer 1

【答案】

Hello, Mary. I am Li Ming. We are in the same school. I am in Class 3 Grade 8. I like meeting people. I saw your post online and I know you feel very lonely. I would like to give you some advice. I think you should make more friends and talk more with them. In this way, you can share your happiness and sorrow with them. Besides, you can read books and listen to some music in your free time. I would like to be your friends and show you around our city. We can play games together after class. I am sure you will be happy and like this new environment.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文是材料作文，Mary是剛剛來(lái)到杭州這個(gè)城市，她感覺(jué)很孤獨(dú)。題目要求我們以李明的身份給Mary發(fā)一個(gè)帖子，做一下自我介紹，給Mary提一些建議，并且?guī)椭�她。表格中給出了我們李明的一些信息，和給Mary的建議，我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)把他們翻譯出來(lái)，并且再補(bǔ)充一些內(nèi)容，給Mary幫助。寫作時(shí)，我們要把所有的這些要點(diǎn)都包括在內(nèi)，要符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)規(guī)范，并且提出的建議要合理，要符合內(nèi)容的需要。這篇短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，第一人稱來(lái)敘述。寫作時(shí)多使用一些連詞或是好的句型和短語(yǔ)，使文章意思連貫，表達(dá)流暢。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文，作者以李明的身份給Mary寫了回帖，內(nèi)容符合題目要求，使用的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱都非常準(zhǔn)確。首先作者先介紹了自己的情況；接下來(lái)針對(duì)Mary的問(wèn)題，給Mary提出了一些建議；最后寫了如何幫助Mary。意思連貫，內(nèi)容完整；其次這篇作文使用了正確的人稱和時(shí)態(tài)，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)規(guī)范；最后作文中使用了一些較好的句型，如I saw your post online and I know you feel very lonely、think you should make more friends and talk more with them. In this way, you can share your happiness and sorrow with them.、I would like to be your friends and show you around our city、I am sure you will be happy and like this new environment等。