Question

【題目】書面表達

上周末你與同學(xué)一起爬西山。請你根據(jù)以下要點，寫一篇游記。

1. 早上在校門口集合，8：00乘車出發(fā)，一小時后到達山腳。

2. 爬上山頂，欣賞美景。

3. 在山頂上唱歌，跳舞，下棋，玩得很開心。

4.午餐后下山，下午3點到家。

5. 簡單談下你對此活動的感受。

要求： 1. 可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)

2. 字?jǐn)?shù)120詞

參考詞匯：the West Mountain 西山

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Answer 1

【答案】

Last weekend,. I climbed the West Mountain with my classmates. All of us gathered at the gate of our school early in the morning, and then we set off by bus at 8：00 a.m. We were singing and chatting all the way, and reached the foot of the mountain an hour later.

The moment we arrived at the destination, we began to climb in high spirits. Soon we got to the top of the mountain. How beautiful it was when we looked at the view from the top! We sang, danced, played chess, and had the pictures taken on the top of the mountain. How happy we were! We went down the mountain after having lunch and arrived home at 3：00 p.m, tired but happy.

The activity benefited us a lot. Not only did it get us close to nature and give us relaxation from heavy school work, it also promoted the friendship among us. What a wonderful time !

【解析】

試題分析：本題給出大量的信息，包括活動時間、集合時間、出發(fā)時間以及返回時間；集合地點、活動地點；活動內(nèi)容等，注意將這些內(nèi)容介紹清楚。寫作中注意用詞準(zhǔn)確，邏輯清楚，并注意句子的時態(tài)一般用過去式。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，、條理清楚，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

寫作亮點：范文中用一些短語和句式，增加了文章的色彩，如How beautiful it was when we looked at the view from the top!用到感嘆句式；Not only did it get us close to nature and give us relaxation from heavy school work, it also promoted the friendship among us這個句子運用not only but also連接兩個句子，第一個句子用部分倒裝 ，使句子結(jié)構(gòu)復(fù)雜化，多背誦范文。