Question

根據(jù)所給提示,寫一篇80詞左右的短文，介紹你的假期之旅。
假如你是Mary，剛結(jié)束暑假旅游回到學(xué)校，請(qǐng)你講述一下你的假期之旅。提示：
暑假里乘飛機(jī)和父母去北京旅行。
第一天，去了故宮拍了許多照片。
第二天，去了長(zhǎng)城看到許多旅客并了解許多關(guān)于長(zhǎng)城的知識(shí)。
最后去了王府井購物，買了許多紀(jì)念品。
談?wù)勥@次旅行的感想。

Answer 1

Last summer, my parents and I went to Beijing for our summer holiday. We took the plane there. It’s a fast and comfortable journey。We went to see the Palace Museum as soon as we got to Beijing. We were very excited when we saw the Palace Museum and we took a lot of photos there. 
On the second day of our trip, we went to see the Great Wall. It was a famous view in the world. It was very great; we saw a lot of tourists. We listened to the tour guide, and knew a lot about it.
At last we went shopping in the city center of Beijing---Wangfujing Street. We bought a lot of souvenirs.
We enjoyed our trip very much. It was a happy experience and I will never forget it.

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