Question

13．針對私家車日益增加的現(xiàn)狀，學校就發(fā)展私家車的利弊進行調(diào)查，請根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容寫一篇90詞左右的短文，闡述其利弊；可適當拓展并談談你的看法或建議．
有利因素：出行方便；促進社會發(fā)展
不利因素：造成交通擁堵，引發(fā)更多事故，加重環(huán)境污染
要求：
1．內(nèi)容包含所有的提示信息；
2．意思連貫，語句通順；
3．詞數(shù)要求：80---100詞．提示詞：
1．do a survey  
2．private car； 
3．convient； 
4．cause pollution 
5．traffic accident
6．a(chǎn)dvice      
7．had better 
8．walk   
9．ride a bike  
10．instead of
Yesterday，our school made a survey about private cars．Some students think it'sconvenient for people to go by car．a(chǎn)nd it promote the development of societyBut most students don't agree．Neither do I．Cars can cause more serious pollution．The more people travel by cars，the worse our world will be．What's more，the traffic will be heavier．As a result，there will be more traffic accidents．
In my view，we should walk or go by bike instead of by car．We can also take a bus when we travel for a shot distance．We should do what we can for protecting our environment．Let's begin now．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是談談私家車的利弊和自己的觀點，時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．有利因素：出行方便；促進社會發(fā)展
2．不利因素：造成交通擁堵，引發(fā)更多事故，加重環(huán)境污染
3．我的觀點
常用到的重點短語：
make a survey  做調(diào)查
what's more 再者
instead of代替
by+交通工具 乘坐…
as a result結果
【高分句型】
1．The more people travel by cars，the worse our world will be．
"the+比較級，the+比較級"結構，常表示"越…，就越…"，是一個復合句，其中前面的句子是狀語從句，后面的句子是主句．

2．We should do what we can for protecting our environment
 what we can作為do的賓語從句，what是引導詞．

解答 Yesterday，our school made a survey about private cars．Some students think it's convenient for people to go by car．a(chǎn)nd it promote the development of society （有利因素）But most students don't agree．Neither do I．Cars can cause more serious pollution．The more people travel by cars，the worse our world will be【高分句型】．What's more，the traffic will be heavier．As a result，there will be more traffic accidents．（不利因素）
       In my view，we should walk or go by bike instead of by car．We can also take a bus when we travel for a shot distance．We should do what we can for protecting our environment【高分句型】．Let's begin now．（我的建議）

點評 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個提綱的要點．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時候，應該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達清楚的要點和細節(jié)．