Question

【題目】為了使生活更美好,社會需要正能量( positive energy)。生活中，我們需要他人的幫助，也要學會幫助他人。請你在網(wǎng)上給“What Would You Do?"本期節(jié)目留言。內(nèi)容包括:

1.你對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法;

2.說說你幫助別人或別人幫助你的一件事例;

3.呼吁大家互幫互助,彼此感恩,讓社會充滿正能量。

作文要求:1.不能照抄原文,不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學校的真實名稱和學生的真實姓名；

2.語句連貫,詞數(shù)80左右。作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

In the program, a customer stood up when the blind woman was cheated in the cake shop.

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Answer 1

【答案】In the program, a customer stood up when the blind woman was cheated in the cake shop. I am for her because she was brave enough to help the woman in need.

The other day I saw a little girl crying at a street corner on my way home. I tried my best to make her stop crying. When I knew she was lost, I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until her dad arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.

In my opinion, we are supposed to help each other and be thankful for others' help. In this way, our society will be filled with positive energy. As the saying goes. “The roses in her hand, the flavor in mine."

【解析】

本文屬于話題作文，描述對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法、發(fā)生在你身上正能量的事件以及鼓勵大家相互幫助，并讓世界充滿正能量。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。

亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點詞句，如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。