Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)。（10分）

假如你叫小明，你在生活、學(xué)習(xí)中遇到了一些煩惱和問(wèn)題，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下英文提示寫一封e-mail向你曾經(jīng)的外籍教師Allen征求建議。（15分）

注意：1.郵件的首句已給出。 2.可根據(jù)提示適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 3.字?jǐn)?shù)80左右,不包含已給出的句子.

提示:1. Always have to study. 2. Go to different classes at weekends.

3. Too much homework. –No free time –Feel stressed.

4.Can’t communicate with parents.

Dear Allen,

I have some problems, I really need your help.

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Allen,

I have some problems. I really need your help. Now I’m in the Junior 3, the last year of my Junior School. So it is important for me to study well. I must go to different classes at weekends. On Saturday, I will go to the English class. On Sunday, I must go to the art and music class. What’s more, I have much homework every day. I spend 2 hours every day to finish my homework. I have no free time and I feel stressed. And I can’t communicate with my parents because I have no time to tell them my problems. I want to go to a senior high school, but I don’t know what to do with my time and study. Can you give me some advice?

Yours,

Xiaoming

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以小明的身份，將自己學(xué)習(xí)和生活中遇到的問(wèn)題和煩惱，告訴Allen老師，向他征求建議。題目中給出了我們寫作的提綱，小明的問(wèn)題有學(xué)習(xí)任務(wù)重，總是要學(xué)習(xí)，周末也要去上不同的課程，作業(yè)非常多，不能和父母交流等。我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。教材中我們接觸過(guò)類似這樣的短文，把自己生活中的煩惱，寫信告訴某人。這樣的短文我們應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，第一人稱形式。問(wèn)題比較多，寫作時(shí)，要注意將這些問(wèn)題闡述清楚，還要注意他們之間的連接，使用一些短語(yǔ)或連詞，如also, what’s more, and 等，這里可以使短文整體比較連貫。另外，短文中有些內(nèi)容是可以自己發(fā)揮的，要注意發(fā)揮的內(nèi)容貼合文章整體的需要。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文，短文中作者按照題目要求，以小明的身份，把自己生活、學(xué)習(xí)中的問(wèn)題表達(dá)出來(lái)，向Allen征求建議。這篇短文主要有兩個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)，一是內(nèi)容完整，表達(dá)清楚。作者按照題目的要求，把小明的問(wèn)題一一敘述了出來(lái)，使用了正確的句型和詞匯；而是結(jié)尾處比較符合這封信的目的，用問(wèn)句結(jié)束，向老師征求建議。短文中作者使用了不同的短語(yǔ)、句型，使文章表達(dá)有層次，意思連貫。文中較好的句型有Now I’m in the Junior 3, the last year of my Junior School. So it is important for me to study well.、What’s more, I have much homework every day.、I have no free time and I feel stressed、And I can’t communicate with my parents because I have no time to tell them my problems等。