Question

目前有不少學(xué)生擁有自己的手機(jī)，青少年俱樂(lè)部關(guān)于這個(gè)問(wèn)題做了一個(gè)調(diào)查，并收集了關(guān)于學(xué)生擁有手機(jī)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)和不足，請(qǐng)根據(jù)調(diào)查的信息，談?wù)勛约旱母惺芎涂捶ā?br />

	Do you agree students should have a mobile phone at school ?
	46% of students agree.	54% of students don’t agree.
	Mobile phone is very  useful.	They think it can bring some  problems.
	make a call anywhere send text messages take photos keep friends’ phone numbers … …	make noise harm people’s physical health dangerous be bad for study … …
I think ……

要求：1.詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右，開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出不計(jì)入總數(shù)。
2.內(nèi)容必須包括上面的要點(diǎn)，自己適當(dāng)加入個(gè)人的觀點(diǎn)。
3.條理清楚，語(yǔ)句連貫。
Now more and more students have mobile phones._______________________
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Answer 1

One possible version：
  Now more and more students have mobile phones. The Youth Club make a survey on whether you agree students should have a mobile phone at school ?46% of students agree. They think it is useful. It is convenient for students to make a call at anywhere and send text messages to the relatives and friends. They also can use mobile phones to take photos of them. What’s more, the mobile phones can keep friends’ phone numbers and some important information.
However, 54% of students don’t agree with it. They think it can bring some problems. Because students play games or send and receive mobile phone text messages at class, this will make a noise and affect the other teachers and students. The mobile phones harm people’s physical health. The most dangerous is the electric wave radiation which is thought to be harmful to users’ brains. It may make the students lazy to download answers from the internet , so they may are bad for their study.
In my opinion, students shouldn't take mobile phones to school, because it may make us play more and study less.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，對(duì)學(xué)生是否應(yīng)該帶手機(jī)進(jìn)行了調(diào)查。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)為單數(shù)三人稱(chēng)，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為動(dòng)賓表結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見(jiàn)句式的應(yīng)用，比如：They think......，the mobile phones can.......，及Because students...... 等句式的應(yīng)用。寫(xiě)作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫(xiě)作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要表達(dá)自己的的觀點(diǎn)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。開(kāi)頭說(shuō)了同意學(xué)生帶手機(jī)的理由，接下來(lái)介紹不同意學(xué)生帶手機(jī)的原因，最后闡述自己的觀點(diǎn)。此處用了make a call，take photos of，make a noise，be harmful to 等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。