Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)

在每個(gè)人的成長(zhǎng)過(guò)程中，都或多或少有一些變化，請(qǐng)以How I’ve Changed! 為題寫(xiě)一段話，介紹一下你的過(guò)去與現(xiàn)在的不同。（80~100詞）

How I’ve changed!

Answer 1

【答案】

How I've changed!

My life changed a lot in the last few years，I used to be short and have long hair ,but now I am tall and have short hair ,I used to be quiet and shy ,now I am very outgoing .I used to be afraid of dark ,now I am not .I used to be heavy ,now I am thin and healthy .

My daily life is different and I used to like different thing when I was a child.For example,I didn't use to like tests.Now,I don't mind them.I used to hate gym class.Now it's my favorite class. I used to walk to school. Now, I take the bus .when I was young, I used to have so much time to play with my friends ,but now I am really too busy ,I have to get up early and stay in school all day ,then I go right home and eat dinner.at night, I used to watch TV with my parent or chat with my grandmother , but now I can't . I love sports ,but now, I hardly ever have time to play sport. I have to do lots of homework . I really miss the old days！

【解析】

試題分析：根據(jù)所給材料可知這是一篇命題作文，介紹自己的變化。動(dòng)筆前首先根據(jù)主題組織材料，確定寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容。寫(xiě)作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述。語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文包含了所有要點(diǎn)，能?chē)�繞內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，內(nèi)容具體、豐富。應(yīng)用了較豐富的語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯，用詞準(zhǔn)確、句子通順、行文連貫、表達(dá)清楚，具有較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。層次清晰，語(yǔ)言地道，主題鮮明，內(nèi)容翔實(shí)，格式正確，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。使用了一些比較好的字句。比如：used to，過(guò)去常常做某事；be afraid of，害怕；get up等。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用, 讓文章更出彩。