Question

8．每個人的成長都是一種蛻變的過程，從幼稚走向成熟，從逆境走向成功，請你回憶一下你在成長過程中所經(jīng)歷的一次蛻變，把它寫出來與我們一起分享，好嗎？要求短文內(nèi)容包含以下信息：
1．變化前后分別是什么樣子的？
2．促成你轉(zhuǎn)變的主要原因是什么？
3．你為此變化而付出了怎樣的努力？
4．談?wù)勀阕兓�后的感受�?br />提示：
1．字數(shù)要求在80-100詞左右
2．短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和校名等信息
3．開頭已給出不計入總數(shù)．
_____makes me change 
I used to bea shy girl and stay in the classroom instead of playing with classmates after class． I only like playing computer games at home．Because I hated English，my English mark is very low in the exam．Later，a girl came to my class，and she changed my life．She became my best friend．She asked me to play outside with others．She helped me with my English by encouraging me to read English aloud，to talk to her in English．I also practice English after school．Gradually，My English score was higher and higher．Now，I am a confident and outgoing girl．I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me．From then on，I have confidence to do better in the future．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．主題是談?wù)勛约涸诔砷L過程中所經(jīng)歷的最大的一次轉(zhuǎn)變．結(jié)合寫作內(nèi)容，時態(tài)主要為一般過去時．人稱主要為第一人稱并輔以第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．變化前后分別是什么樣子的？
2．促成你轉(zhuǎn)變的主要原因是什么？
3．你為此變化而付出了怎樣的努力？
4．談?wù)勀阕兓�后的感受�?br />常用到的重點短語：
used to do sth過去常常
instead of 代替而不是
help sb with sth幫助某人做某事
by doing sth通過某種方式
比較級+and+比較級 越來越…
高分句型：
1．I①used to be a shy girl and stay in the classroom②instead of playing with classmates after class．
①用used to do sth表示過去常常，來說明自己的過去．
②instead of 表示代替，而不是，of是介詞，后加名詞代詞或動名詞，此處是跟動名詞；play with sb意為"和某人玩"．
2．I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me．
本句是so…that表示如此…以至于…，that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句．so是副詞修飾這里的形容詞much．其中的make friends with sb表示和誰交朋友．

解答 I used to be a shy girl and stay in the classroom instead of playing with classmates after class．（高分句型） I only like playing computer games at home．Because I hated English，my English mark is very low in the exam．（變化前的樣子）Later，a girl came to my class，and she changed my life．（轉(zhuǎn)變的原因）She became my best friend．She asked me to play outside with others．She helped me with my English by encouraging me to read English aloud，to talk to her in English．I also practice English after school．（我的努力）Gradually，My English score was higher and higher．Now，I am a confident and outgoing girl．I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me．（高分句型）（變化后的樣子）From then on，I have confidence to do better in the future（變化后的感受）．

點評 本篇作文由于提綱材料本身決定了寫作對象、范圍、目的、體裁等，命題者的意圖往往較容易領(lǐng)悟，考生在審題上一般不會出現(xiàn)障礙．可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點提示運用相關(guān)的句型結(jié)構(gòu)靈活的展開作文．考生需注意不要逐詞逐句地進行翻譯，所寫句子要符合英語的表達習(xí)慣．