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1．假如你是李華，從美國(guó)留學(xué)回國(guó)，發(fā)現(xiàn)中國(guó)人民的生活發(fā)生了驚人的變化．根據(jù)以下信息寫(xiě)封信給你的美國(guó)朋友Mike．
1．以前人們出門(mén)必須帶現(xiàn)金，現(xiàn)在大家打車用手機(jī)，吃飯結(jié)賬也用手機(jī)．說(shuō)明變化的原因．
2．以前人們買東西都去實(shí)體店，現(xiàn)在幾乎所有東西都可以網(wǎng)購(gòu)．說(shuō)明變化的原因．
3．你對(duì)這些變化的感受．
字?jǐn)?shù)：120詞左右
參考詞匯：實(shí)體店 brick-and-mortar store      打車hail a car
Dear Mike，
I am back in China now，and the changes in people's life here are striking．
In the past，people had to take some cash when going out，but now we can use our cellphones to hailacar and pay for our meals．（高分句型一）I think the development of smartphones，which is increasingly fast，is the main cause of the change．（高分句型二）
Another difference is that in the past，people would go to brick-and-mortar stores to buy what they wanted，while people can buy almost everything online now．（高分句型三）The development of the Internet and the growth of delivery service combined make online purchase possible．
From my point of view，we are lucky to live in the information age．After all，there are only a few clicks of my mouse between me and a product from America．I hope you can come to China to see the changes in person．
Best wishes，
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假如你是李華，從美國(guó)留學(xué)回國(guó)，發(fā)現(xiàn)中國(guó)人民的生活發(fā)生了驚人的變化．根據(jù)以下信息寫(xiě)封信給你的美國(guó)朋友Mike，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：以前人們出門(mén)必須帶現(xiàn)金，現(xiàn)在大家打車用手機(jī)，吃飯結(jié)賬也用手機(jī)．說(shuō)明變化的原因．以前人們買東西都去實(shí)體店，現(xiàn)在幾乎所有東西都可以網(wǎng)購(gòu)．說(shuō)明變化的原因．你對(duì)這些變化的感受．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：pay for 支付；The development of …的發(fā)展；the growth of delivery service 快遞服務(wù)的發(fā)展；From my point of view從我的觀點(diǎn)的角度；After all畢竟；in person親自；
In the past，people had to take some cash when going out，but now we can use our cellphones to hail a car and pay for our meals．（高分句型一）
I think the development of smartphones，which is increasingly fast，is the main cause of the change．（高分句型二）
Another difference is that in the past，people would go to brick-and-mortar stores to buy what they wanted，while people can buy almost everything online now．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mike，
      I am back in China now，and the changes in people's life here are striking．
      In the past，people had to take some cash when going out，but now we can use our cellphones to hail a car and pay for our meals．（高分句型一）I think the development of smartphones，which is increasingly fast，is the main cause of the change．（高分句型二）
      Another difference is that in the past，people would go to brick-and-mortar stores to buy what they wanted，while people can buy almost everything online now．（高分句型三）The development of the Internet and the growth of delivery service combined make online purchase possible．
       From my point of view，we are lucky to live in the information age．After all，there are only a few clicks of my mouse between me and a product from America．I hope you can come to China to see the changes in person．
       Best wishes，
                                                                                                                 Yours，
                                                                                                                 Li Hua

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