Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是李津，為即將來(lái)天津上大學(xué)的外國(guó)朋友Albert物色好了房屋。請(qǐng)你給 他發(fā)一封郵件告知他相關(guān)情況。主要內(nèi)容包括：

1. 房屋位置：富力花園17樓，交通便利，臨近校園；

2. 面積大小：50平米，一室一廳，廚衛(wèi)齊全；

3. 屋內(nèi)陳設(shè)：家具、空調(diào)等；

4. 租金情況：月付人民幣1000元或年付人民幣11000。

注意1. 詞數(shù)不少于100；

2. 適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：富力花園 Fuli Garden

Hello, Albert.

I have good news to tell you that I have found a flat for you in my city.

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Yours sincerely,

Li Jin

Answer 1

【答案】Hello, Albert.

I have good news to tell you that I have found a flat for you in my city. The flat is on the 17th floor in

Fuli Garden, which is not far away from the university you will study in. There are lots of basic facilities nearby, such as the banks, stores, restaurants, and so on. In a word, it's very convenient for your life.

The whole flat covers about 50 square meters with a living room, a bedroom, a kitchen, a bathroom and a balcony, which I think can satisfy your fundamental needs. It's also equipped with a refrigerator, a TV set, a washing machine, an air conditioner and the high-speed WiFi.

As to the rent, it can be paid per month (1,000 RMB) or per year (11,000 RMB). If you are interested in it, please e-mail me as soon as possible.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Jin

【解析】

這是一篇應(yīng)用文。要求考生寫(xiě)一封郵件，告知即將來(lái)天津上大學(xué)的外國(guó)朋友Albert，他幫忙租到的房子的詳細(xì)情況。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時(shí)態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說(shuō)，把支持句作為分說(shuō)，并以這種方式安排所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容。

要求：告知房屋的詳細(xì)情況

1）房屋的位置。（location of the flat）

2）周圍的環(huán)境。（surroundings of the flat）

3) 房屋內(nèi)容的設(shè)施。（facilities in the flat）

4) 房屋的價(jià)錢。（price of the flat）

第二步:列提綱 （重點(diǎn)詞組）

far away from; facilities; In a word; be convenient for; fundamental needs; be equipped with; as soon as possible.;look forward to;

第三步：連詞成句

1. Fuli Garden is not far away from the university.

2. There are lots of basic facilities nearby.

3. In a word, it's very convenient for your life.

4. I think it can satisfy your fundamental needs.

5. It's also equipped with a refrigerator.

6. Looking forward to your early reply.

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡，書(shū)寫(xiě)一定要規(guī)范清晰，

第五步：潤(rùn)色修改