Question

【題目】閱讀下面短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

The elephant and the fly

An elephant was standing and picking leaves from a tree. A small fly came，flying and buzzing (嗡嗡叫) near his ear. The elephant waved it away with his long ears. Then the fly came again, and the elephant waved it away once more.

This was repeated several times. Then the elephant asked the fly, “Why are you so restless and noisy? Why can’t you stay for a while in one place? ”

The fly answered, “I am attracted to whatever I see, hear or smell. My five senses pull me constantly in all directions and I cannot resist them．What is your secret? How can you stay so calm and still?”

The elephant stopped eating and said, “My five senses do not rule my attention. Whatever I do, I get involved in it. Now that I am eating, I am completely absorbed in eating. In this way I can enjoy my food and chew it better. I rule and control my attention, and not the other way around. So when you are in charge of your five senses and attention, your mind will become calm too.”

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1、以約30個(gè)詞概括短文的內(nèi)容；

2、然后以約120個(gè)詞就“專注”這一主題發(fā)表你的看法，并包括以下要點(diǎn)：

（1）看完故事后的感受及啟發(fā)；

（2）描述一段你或他人因受太多干擾而使學(xué)習(xí)、生活或工作受到影響的不愉快經(jīng)歷；

（3）你打算在高三這一年里如何保持專注、專心。

【寫作要求】

1、在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2、作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

【答案】

An elephant was constantly disturbed by a restless fly, who wondered about the secret of remaining calm. The elephant revealed that calmness would be obtained when one’s senses and attention were focused.

After reading the story, I was inspired by what the elephant said. The ability to focus one’s attention is the key to success in doing anything. Just like the fly, a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired, and fail to achieve his success.

This reminds me of my displeased story in Grade One. I was so excited to find that there were after-class activities for us to attend. During the first term, I was attracted by the various activities, such as singing, drawing and so on, and I was eager to take part. As I didn’t spend enough time on my studies, I fell behind my classmates and failed in some important exams.

From this experience I have learned a lesson that one should focus on one thing at a time before he can get it well done. As a Senior Three student, I intend to set a clear goal for myself --It is study that comes first. Now, I am fully aware that only when I have a clear and determined mind and draw my attention on it can I achieve my goal in the end.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇習(xí)作為任務(wù)型讀寫作文。閱讀材料為故事性的短文。因此概括時(shí)應(yīng)圍繞“什么人、發(fā)生了什么事、結(jié)局如何”來寫，即闡述一個(gè)故事梗概，忌力陳細(xì)節(jié)，忌摻入個(gè)人評價(jià)。所謂簡述相似經(jīng)歷，即與原閱讀材料的故事一樣能揭示同一主題思想而不同情節(jié)的故事。確定主題后，挑選一個(gè)類似的能說明主題思想的故事。在組織故事時(shí)，由于受篇幅的限制，也盡可能省去心理描寫和對話等細(xì)節(jié)，用簡練的語言（盡量用間接引語）把故事的過程講清楚即可。寫完故事后，應(yīng)把你所寫的故事和原材料的故事所揭示的主題思想用一兩句話寫出來, 即篇末點(diǎn)題。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】：本篇習(xí)作第一段用30字左右的詞數(shù)先簡單地概括了短文，再點(diǎn)出了本文的主題：專注。第二段說明感想。比較好的句子有Just like the fly, a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired, and fail to achieve his success.成功地從故事過度到本文主題。用的很恰當(dāng)?shù)木渥舆�有第三段第一句This reminds me of my displeased story in Grade One.又從主題聯(lián)系到自身。最后一段緊扣要點(diǎn)，說明高三將會(huì)如何專注。