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【題目】A senior lawmaker on Thursday warned of increasing mortality of lung cancer caused by air pollution.

Of all cancers, lung cancer mortality rate has increased the fastest in recent years, said lawmaker Yang Wei, director of the National Natural Science Foundation of China and member of the National People's Congress (NPC) Standing Committee.

Yang told a group discussion that recent studies show lung cancer is the top killer for males and the second largest killer for females, partially caused by accumulation of air pollutants.

"We always talked about smoking less to keep healthy, but one of the primary reason is the polluted air," he told lawmakers discussing a report on the enforcement（實施） of the Law on the Prevention and Control of Atmospheric Pollution.

China has vowed to strengthen air pollution control. Beijing will adopt a special air pollution control plan for the upcoming APEC meetings, featuring temporary closure of factories in the event of a pollution warning.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1. 以約30詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。

2. 以約120詞就“十面霾伏”發(fā)表看法，內(nèi)容包括：

（1） 你身邊有霧霾現(xiàn)象嗎？

（2） 請闡述霧霾的成因；

（3） 你認(rèn)為如何才能有效地控制霧霾現(xiàn)象？

【寫作要求】

1. 作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不能直接引用原文中的句子。

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】

The passage states that air pollution, also called smog, is severe in China, which will cause lung cancer. So the government has decided to take some measures to solve this problem.

As a matter of fact, living in a most developed city in China, I can always see smog surrounding us. In particular, in wet climates in southern areas like Guangzhou and Zhuhai, people usually suffer from continuous coughing, difficult breathing and aching eyes resulting from heavier smog.

As we can see, varieties of reasons can account for this phenomenon. To start with, when winter comes, the northern cities in China need to provide warming service by fueling energy, which must directly produce a large amount of unclean air into the atmosphere. What’s worse, with the development of private cars, air pollution must be awful result of an enormous number of cars driving on the roads. Last but not least, there are no strict laws or regulations to prevent the air from being polluted.

To solve this tough global problem, I think it a duty for every single person to start from little actions. As for the government, I strongly appeal that the government should make some related laws to place restrictions on this issue. When it comes to individuals, I sincerely request that we students persuade our parents out of driving privates cars when not necessary. Only if all human beings act mutually can the problem of air pollution be solved effectively.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇開放性作文，要求先用大約30個詞概括所給的短文的主要內(nèi)容，再用大約120個詞就“十面霾伏”發(fā)表看法。根據(jù)提示的信息可知，文章應(yīng)從霧霾的成因、控制霧霾的方法等幾個方面入手。寫作時要充分發(fā)揮想象，適當(dāng)?shù)奶砑幼约旱挠^點，使文章內(nèi)容豐滿，并達(dá)到要求的字?jǐn)?shù)。此外，為了提高文章檔次，還要注意使用多種句式和高級詞匯，并添加關(guān)聯(lián)詞讓行文流暢。

【亮點說明】本篇書面表達(dá)格式規(guī)范，語言流暢。第一段概括了短文的主要內(nèi)容；第二段介紹了我國目前的霧霾情況；第三段敘述了霧霾的成因；第四段提出了自己的看法和一些可行性的建議。本文的亮點是運用了復(fù)雜的句式如定語從句，被動語態(tài)等，提升了文章的檔次；as a matter of fact 、result from 、only +狀語等結(jié)構(gòu)的運用也為文章增添了亮色。