Question

11．為紀(jì)念汶川大地震三周年，某英文報(bào)發(fā)起關(guān)于災(zāi)區(qū)新貌的征文活動(dòng)．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下圖片提示，以"Great Changes"為題，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文應(yīng)征．內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：
（1）某中學(xué)災(zāi)后三年來(lái)的變化，如教學(xué)與活動(dòng)場(chǎng)所，以及師生精神面貌等；
（2）發(fā)生變化的原因；
（3）你的感想．
注意：
（1）短文標(biāo)題與開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
（2）可根據(jù)圖片提示適當(dāng)發(fā)揮
（3）詞數(shù)：120左右
Great Changes
    I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have taken place in the school over the past tree years．
On May 12，2008，a severe earthquake destroyed almost everything in the school，leaving badly-damaged buildings．It is now，however，taking on a new look．Tall buildings have been put up，including classroom and laboratory buildings，and a library．There is also a newly-built standard playground．In the new environment，teachers and students are living happily and working hard．It is really amazing that the once-ruined place has now been turned into a beautiful school，full of life．
Obviously，without the help of the whole society，there would be no new schoo l today．It is love and concern that have brought the great changes．Many hands make light work．We can work wonders if we continue as a family，caring for each other and helping those in need．Union is strength．．

Answer 1

分析 本文采用了"圖表+提綱類(lèi)"形式，根據(jù)文章所給提示信息和圖片提示以"Great Changes"為題給某英文報(bào)寫(xiě)一篇征文．寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：（1）某中學(xué)災(zāi)后三年來(lái)的變化，如教學(xué)與活動(dòng)場(chǎng)所，以及師生精神面貌等；（2）發(fā)生變化的原因；（3）你的感想．既是提綱作文又是圖畫(huà)類(lèi)作文．時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)該以一般過(guò)去時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．人稱(chēng)以第三人稱(chēng)為主．重要短語(yǔ)：be impressed by（對(duì)…．印象深刻），take place  （發(fā)生），take on a new look （呈現(xiàn)新面貌），turned into （變成），without the help of （在…．幫助之下），care for（關(guān)心），in need （需要）．

解答 Great Changes
     I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have taken place in the school over the past three years．
     On May 12，2008，a severe earthquake destroyed almost everything in the school，leaving badly-damaged buildings．【高分句型】It is now，however，taking on a new look．Tall buildings have been put up，including classroom and laboratory buildings，and a library．There is also a newly-built standard playground．In the new environment，teachers and students are living happily and working hard．It is really amazing that the once-ruined place has now been turned into a beautiful school，full of life．【高分句型】（三年來(lái)的變化）
     Obviously，without the help of the whole society，there would be no new schoo l today．【高分句型】It is love and concern that have brought the great changes．（發(fā)生變化的原因） Many hands make light work．【高分句型】We can work wonders if we continue as a family，caring for each other and helping those in need．Union is strength..（你的感想）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 寫(xiě)好這類(lèi)圖片及提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真分析所給提示信息，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，并認(rèn)真看圖，圍繞主題，提煉要點(diǎn)，發(fā)揮想象，語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔．選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，最后還要認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等．