Question

5．假如你是李華，你的英國(guó)筆友Bill來(lái)信詢問(wèn)你家鄉(xiāng)是否有霧霾天氣，情況如何．請(qǐng)按下面寫一封E-mail：
（1）感謝他得關(guān)心；
（2）介紹情況：
①今年已經(jīng)發(fā)生數(shù)次霧霾天氣，學(xué)生放假，人們健康受到危害，交通受阻，事故增多等．
②人們已認(rèn)識(shí)到霧霾天氣的危害，正采取各種舉措減少其發(fā)生．
③你自己為此做了什么或打算做什么．
注意：1．郵件的開頭已給出；    2．詞數(shù)：100左右；
參考詞匯：霧霾 smog
Dear Bill，
I'm glad to receive your e-mail，
Thank you for your caring for the weather and my health．Now I'd like to tell you something about the smog．
Up to now，the smog has occurred a lot of times．It has done great harm to our daily life．（高分句型一）Many traffic accidents happened，and more and more serious diseases are caused by the smog．Students have to stay at home and their study is affected．
People have realized this and are taking measures to reduce the smog weather，such as burning less coal and using public transport．（高分句型二）
For me，I will go to school on foot，and I will try my best to protect the environment．Would you like to tell me some good ideas？I'm looking forward to your reply．
I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 考查提綱式作文：以李華的名義給你的英國(guó)筆友Bill寫信介紹霧霾（smog）天氣的情況，考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，這篇文章的提綱很詳細(xì)，根據(jù)所給提綱，以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)．語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔．根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料．同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無(wú)拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文用了一些常見的短語(yǔ)：do great harm to"對(duì)…造成傷害"，for fear of"唯恐，害怕"，put off"推遲"，be supposed not to do不應(yīng)該做…，looking forward to"渴望"，還有一些語(yǔ)法知識(shí)和句型：a great number of people have to stay at home for fear of the poisonous air caused by the smog．這句話用過(guò)去分詞做定語(yǔ)，F(xiàn)ortunately，People have realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment．這句話用動(dòng)名詞做賓語(yǔ)，．Effective measures are being taken to reduce the smog weather．這句話用了現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)的被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)，I will go to school by bike or on foot，I will tell whoever I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can．這句話用了whoever引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，還有范文用了What's worse，According to me，這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫．

解答 Dear Bill，
    I'm glad to receive your e-mail．Thank you for your caring for the weather and my health．Now I'd like to tell you something about the smog．
    Up to now，the smog has occurred a lot of times．It has done great harm to our daily life．（高分句型一）Many traffic accidents happened，and more and more serious diseases are caused by the smog．Students have to stay at home and their study is affected．
    People have realized this and are taking measures to reduce the smog weather，such as burning less coal and using public transport．（高分句型二）
    For me，I will go to school on foot，and I will try my best to protect the environment．Would you like to tell me some good ideas？I'm looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                            Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                             Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．