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18．假如你是我市一名高三學(xué)生李華，你打算報(bào)考一所外語(yǔ)學(xué)院．你在網(wǎng)絡(luò)上看到上海外國(guó)語(yǔ)學(xué)院的招生信息（admission information），并對(duì)此非常感興趣．根據(jù)招生要求，你需要用英語(yǔ)撰寫(xiě)一份個(gè)人申請(qǐng)報(bào)告，內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括：
    1．記述自己的個(gè)性特長(zhǎng)及取得的成果；
    2．說(shuō)明進(jìn)入大學(xué)后的努力方向及設(shè)想等．
注意：1．詞數(shù)：120-150；開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)．
    2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir or Madam，
I'm writing to apply to study in your university．
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I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類(lèi)書(shū)面表達(dá)，文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來(lái)了，但不是很具體，考生要根據(jù)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行拓展發(fā)揮，不能有遺漏，內(nèi)容一定要充實(shí)，這就要求增加了難度．在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次．同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second，Besides，What's more等，讓文章看起來(lái)很有條理、流暢．
重要短語(yǔ)：
surf the net 瀏覽網(wǎng)頁(yè)，get on well with和…相處好，communicate with sb與某人交流，intend to打算，major in主修，be admitted into被錄�。�
高分句型：
1．I read about the admission information while surfing the net the other day．這句話(huà)用了省略句，
2．Speeches delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on，are also my favorite．這句話(huà)用了過(guò)去分詞做定語(yǔ)delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on修飾speeches．
3．As we all know，English is a universal language and I like to communicate with different people，so I intend to major in English if I am admitted into your university．這句話(huà)用了as引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，so引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句，在這一從句中又包含一個(gè)if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
I'm writing to apply to study in your university．I read about the admission information while surfing the net the other day．I'm really interested in it．（高分句型）（寫(xiě)作意圖）
I'm an outgoing girl and I can get on well with all my classmates．I do well in most of my subjects，especially in English．I like reading English poems and enjoy English movies．Speeches delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on，are also my favorite．（高分句型）I once won the first prize for English Speech Contest held in our city and was honored the Best Speaker for my excellence performances．（自我介紹）
As we all know，English is a universal language and I like to communicate with different people，so I intend to major in English if I am admitted into your university．（高分句型）
I want to have a job relating with languages in the future and I believe I can help promote cultural communication between China and the world．（入學(xué)后的打算）
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文屬于應(yīng)用文中的申請(qǐng)報(bào)告，范文中包含申請(qǐng)項(xiàng)目、具備條件、懇請(qǐng)申請(qǐng)單位考慮自己的申請(qǐng)，表示謝意，期盼回復(fù)等；寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中語(yǔ)言言簡(jiǎn)意賅，語(yǔ)氣誠(chéng)懇禮貌，避免了浮華、夸張的辭藻，靈活運(yùn)用了一些高級(jí)詞匯和固定短語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)確表述，合理的使用過(guò)渡語(yǔ)和連接詞，使得整篇文章過(guò)度自然，銜接緊密．