Question

假定你是中學(xué)生李華。在一位名叫TigerMom的學(xué)生家長(zhǎng)的博客上，你看到如下內(nèi)容。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)博客內(nèi)容、寫作要點(diǎn)和要求，給這位家長(zhǎng)回復(fù)。

I’m the mother of a sixteen-year-old. I have a rule for my daughter：be among the top 5 students or get punished in one way or another. She has been doing very well in school，but some friends of mine keep telling me that I put too much pressure on her. Am I wrong?

寫作要點(diǎn)：

1．表明自己的看法；

2．陳述自己的理由(可舉例說明)；

3．提出至少兩條建議。

4．短文詞數(shù)不少于100(不含已寫好的部分)。

Hi，TigerMom，

What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China.

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Answer 1

【答案】

不唯一

Hi，TigerMom，

What_puzzles_you_is_actually_a_puzzle_for_many_parents_in_China.  In my opinion, what you think and what you do are not suitable.

Although high grades are important in assessing students and for their future university admission，development in wisdom，emotion，health，and life attitude should never be ignored. There are many examples around us. Some top  students in school have turned out not to be as successful in society as they are expected. The reason is often that the pressure from their parents allows them almost no time for other activities. Besides，punishment is by no means a wise choice to help them grow up mentally and physically.

So I suggest that you take your friends’ advice. More importantly，let her live like a lovely girl；let her have more friends and social activities；and let her make mistakes of her own as the teenagers often do.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇應(yīng)用文，首先表明自己對(duì)這件事的看法，將對(duì)感情，健康方面的提升要點(diǎn)，更為重要進(jìn)行闡述，再舉例對(duì)所提看法的說明，寫作中注意使用平時(shí)積累的“起承轉(zhuǎn)合”的連詞，使用萬能句型造句，最后提出自己的建議。

考點(diǎn)：應(yīng)用文中書信類文體

點(diǎn)評(píng)：對(duì)于應(yīng)用文寫作要簡(jiǎn)潔明了，直入主題，平時(shí)學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)多進(jìn)行作文模板的記憶，萬能句型的積累，高中作文寫作，要注意 在寫作之前，首先對(duì)題目進(jìn)行認(rèn)真的審清，并在腦海中回想自己積累的哪些句式、句型、單詞能用進(jìn)來，這些單詞、句型都應(yīng)是經(jīng)典的，不會(huì)錯(cuò)的。

寫的過程中，多注意靈活使用定語從句，包括非限制性定語從句。要熟悉英美人寫文章的習(xí)慣，遇到專有地名、人名一定要用非限制性定語從句，強(qiáng)調(diào)唯一性。平時(shí)的英語作文就可以多嘗試使用這些表達(dá)，考試時(shí)才能游刃有余，胸有成竹。