Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是李華,你于2017年3月26號購買了一部iPhone 7手機,因有質(zhì)量問題,要求該商店退換。請根據(jù)下列要點,用英文給該店經(jīng)理寫一封投訴信。

要點: 1. 問題: 手機無法上網(wǎng),不能視頻聊天;店內(nèi)暫無配件,需等一個月才能修好;

2. 要求: 公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換或退款。

注意: 1. 詞數(shù)100左右;

2. 開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好,不計入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯: 配件 spare part

Dear Sir,

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Thank you for your consideration.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir,

I am writing to you for the iPhone 7 I bought on 26th of March, 2017 at your shop. After I took it home and used it for a while, I found there was something wrong with it. I couldn’t go online with the phone, nor could I use video chat to communicate with my friends. Then I took it to your shop, only to be told that it was a new model and there were no right spare parts in the shop. And also the shop assistant told me it would take a month before the phone was repaired. So I was so desperate on hearing that. How can I wait that long? Therefore, I require that you change a new one for me or give my money back as soon as possible.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：

本文是給你之前買了iPhone 7手機的店寫一封投訴性，陳述手機的質(zhì)量問題,要求該商店退換。文章給出了提綱，成文時應(yīng)注意以下幾點：(1)內(nèi)容要點齊全。描述手機問題并提出要求。(2)人稱使用要恰當。(3)時態(tài)：一般過去時為主。(4)適當使用一些連詞和插入語，使文章自然、流暢。(5)恰當使用一些高級詞匯和句型，以增加文章的檔次。

【亮點說明】

1.使用高級句型：使用含有定語從句的句子I am writing to you for the iPhone 7 I bought on 26th of March, 2017 at your shop；否定詞放句首的部分倒裝nor could I use video chat to communicate with my friends.；不定式做意料之外的結(jié)果狀語Then I took it to your shop, only to be told that it was a new model 2.使用了過渡詞語：And also，Therefore等。3.使用了重要短語：communicate with和…交流；give back歸還，恢復(fù)。