Question

18．Directions：Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese．
最近某學(xué)校在學(xué)生中做了一次"有煩惱向誰說？"的調(diào)查，調(diào)查結(jié)果如圖表示．請你簡要描述調(diào)查結(jié)果，并談?wù)勀阕约旱南敕ǎ?br />
I am a Senior Three student．Recently we have carried out a survey--"who to share my worry？"The main findings are as follows．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
Nevertheless（1），there are also 58% who don't share their troubles at all（2），preferring to （3）work on themselves．然而，有58%的人根本不與他人訴說困難，寧愿獨(dú)自承擔(dān)．
（1）neverthless然而，關(guān)聯(lián)詞，承接上下文使文章流暢，邏輯顯然．
（2）who引導(dǎo)了定語從句，以58%為先行詞，表示"58%的根本不與他人訴說困難的人"．
（3）preferring是現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨狀語，書面表達(dá)中運(yùn)用分詞做狀語總是吸引眼球的亮點．
句型二：
I feel it's quite natural to use these three ways to deal with personal affairs（1），but what surprises me most（2）is the proportion each part takes我覺得用這三種方法解決個人問題很自然，但是最使我驚訝的是每一部分所占的比例．
（1）It's quite natural to use these three ways…，該句中it充當(dāng)了形式主語，真正的主語是動詞不定式to use these three ways；
（2）what surprised me most是what 引導(dǎo)的主語從句，what 在主語從句中充當(dāng)主語．
句型三：
 It seems rather common for the students nowadays to choose to keep their mouths shut rather than （1）to turn to someone else when in trouble（2）在困境中時現(xiàn)在的學(xué)生選擇閉嘴而不向他人求助似乎相當(dāng)普遍．
（1）rather than而非，而不；前后往往用并列的形式進(jìn)行對照，表達(dá)強(qiáng)烈的語氣；
（2）when in trouble表示"在困境中時"，是省略的狀語從句，完整的句子是when they are in trouble；狀語從句中常常可以同時省略與主句相同的主語和be動詞，使得句子更簡練．

解答 I am a Senior Three student．Recently we have carried out a survey--"who to share my worry？"The main findings are as follows．
      9% of the students surveyed select friends or school-mates as their ideal listeners when having trouble while another 33% tend to seek advice from teachers and parents．Nevertheless，there are also 58% who don't share their troubles at all，preferring to work on themselves【高分句型一】（圖片描述）．
    Personally speaking，I feel it's quite natural to use these three ways to deal with personal affairs，but what surprises me most is the proportion each part takes【高分句型二】．My first reaction to the survey results is"shock"．It seems rather common for the students nowadays to choose to keep their mouths shut rather than to turn to someone else when in trouble【高分句型三】．Is it so hard for them to place trust in others？After having a second thought，I realize that we teenagers may be more independent，thoughtful and strong-minded than our parents and teachers expect us to be，as we have easy access to the online information we need-either by a computer or a mobile phone-to handle our worry properly in daily life（自己的看法）．

點評 寫作時首先審題要到位：審體裁、人稱和時態(tài)；審要點，根據(jù)題目的要求審要點，要點要包括文字中的要點，也要包括圖片或表格中的主要信息．其次要考慮詞語和句型的選用，詞語和句型的選用要包含作者的感情色彩和增強(qiáng)表達(dá)的氣勢；再次，運(yùn)用關(guān)聯(lián)詞如besides、what's  more、moreover、for one thing …for another等，使文字更加流暢．