Question

6．假如你是李華，你的英國網(wǎng)友Henry來信說他在周末幫助父母做家務(wù)時，不小心被開水燙傷，需休息幾周．請你給他發(fā)一封電子郵件．主要內(nèi)容包括：
（1）表示同情；
（2）對康復(fù)期間的建議：（如燙傷注意事項，如何打發(fā)無聊時光等，并給出理由）；
（3）表達你的祝愿．
注意：（1）詞數(shù)：100左右；
（2）可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
（3）信的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Henry，
I'm sorry to hear thatyou got burnt while assisting your parents to do housework and that you need to take several weeks to heal at home．（高分句型一）It was very considerate of you to help them do it at weekends．Here are some of my suggestions which are beneficial to your recovery．
During your recovery，for one thing，pay attention to not rubbing your wounds，otherwise they may get infected．（高分句型二）For another，it is definitely boring during the rest days while staying in bed．You'd better take advantage of this time to read your favourite novels or keep in touch with all your good friends through E-chat，which can keep you a good mood．（高分句型三）
I hope that you can take good care of yourself．I am convinced that only after you do as I have told you to will you be well soon．
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息你的英國網(wǎng)友Henry來信說他在周末幫助父母做家務(wù)時，不小心被開水燙傷，需休息幾周．請你給他發(fā)一封電子郵件，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：（1）表示同情；（2）對康復(fù)期間的建議：（如燙傷注意事項，如何打發(fā)無聊時光等，并給出理由）；（3）表達你的祝愿． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：do housework做家務(wù)；at weekends在周末；are beneficial to對…有益；for one thing一方面；For another
另一方面；take advantage of 利用；take good care of 照顧；
I'm sorry to hear that you got burnt while assisting your parents to do housework and that you need to take several weeks to heal at home．（高分句型一）
During your recovery，for one thing，pay attention to not rubbing your wounds，otherwise they may get infected．（高分句型二）
You'd better take advantage of this time to read your favourite novels or keep in touch with all your good friends through E-chat，which can keep you a good mood．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Henry，
       I'm sorry to hear that you got burnt while assisting your parents to do housework and that you need to take several weeks to heal at home．（高分句型一）It was very considerate of you to help them do it at weekends．Here are some of my suggestions which are beneficial to your recovery．
      During your recovery，for one thing，pay attention to not rubbing your wounds，otherwise they may get infected．（高分句型二）For another，it is definitely boring during the rest days while staying in bed．You'd better take advantage of this time to read your favourite novels or keep in touch with all your good friends through E-chat，which can keep you a good mood．（高分句型三）
       I hope that you can take good care of yourself．I am convinced that only after you do as  I have told you to will you be well soon．
       Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                            Li  Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．