Question

10．假定你是李華，你校成立了青年志愿者協(xié)會(huì)，你想報(bào)名參加，于是向協(xié)會(huì)提出申請(qǐng)，陳述你
加人這個(gè)組織的理由．文章開(kāi)頭已為你寫好．理由包括：
1．在現(xiàn)代社會(huì)里幫助別人是禮貌行為，且我們處于困境時(shí)也需要他人幫助；
2．通過(guò)幫助別人，自己獲得體驗(yàn)，增強(qiáng)信心；
3．志愿者活動(dòng)使生活更有意義，使世界更美好．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir or Madam，
I would like to be a volunteer in my spare time．
                                                    
Yours                                                                               
 Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
We need others'help in case we get into trouble
高分句型二：
What's more，volunteering makes us feel better about ourselves，thus making our life more meaningful．
句型一  in case we get into trouble 該句是一個(gè)由in case引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句
句型二  ①volunteering makes us feel better about ourselves 該句主語(yǔ)是由動(dòng)名詞充當(dāng)，動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)，謂語(yǔ)應(yīng)該用單數(shù)
            ②making our life more meaningful此處試用了現(xiàn)在分詞作結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)
此外該文章還有以下高級(jí)詞匯和重要短語(yǔ)：first of all 首先   what's more 而且  in a word 總之

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
    I would like to be a volunteer in my spare time．My reasons are follows：
    First of all，it is good manners to help others，espaecially in modern society．We need others'help in case we get into trouble．（高分句型一）
    Second，we are able to improve ourselves by helping others because we can gain valuable experience and build up our confidence while serving others．What's more，volunteering makes us feel better about ourselves，thus making our life more meaningful．（高分句型二）More importantly，we can make the world a better place to live in by volunteering．（活動(dòng)介紹）
In a word，volunteering can make a difference to our life，and i think it is very rewarding to be a volunteer．（活動(dòng)意義）
                Yours
                 Li Hua

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