Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)（滿(mǎn)分25分）

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

Nowadays, it is not rare to see a man walk on the sidewalks, smartp hone in hand, completely absorbed in the digital world. Just as what computers once achieved, smartphones are transforming our life in every possible way—how we socialize, entertain, and study.

I used to contact friends by phone or QQ. But now I have switched to Wechat, a popular app that allows people to communicate and to share feelings and daily occurrence with fri ends. I can also receive the latest news by subscribing to famous websites. It makes me feel so connected with the rest of the world.

I am truly grateful for the convenience, connection and comfort brought by this marvelous technology. But meanwhile I feel deeply anxious. To stay informed, I constantly update my Wechat, for which I am often distracted. Therefore, we should be cautious not to fall slaves to the smart phones.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)要求就智能手機(jī)帶來(lái)的影響以及你對(duì)這種影響的看法來(lái)進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作。這個(gè)話(huà)題接近學(xué)生生活，學(xué)生可以自由發(fā)揮，發(fā)揮想象。但是需要自己組織好要點(diǎn)，同時(shí)要在謀篇布局上多加考慮，文章的結(jié)構(gòu)層次要分明，脈絡(luò)要清晰。在寫(xiě)作時(shí)，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語(yǔ)或者句型，在能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，這樣才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體。此外，文章要使用第一人稱(chēng)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文的特點(diǎn)是句式的多變和大量短語(yǔ)的運(yùn)用，比如used to，subscribe to，switch to,feel connected with , stay informed, be absorbed in 等。句型結(jié)構(gòu)有it做形式主語(yǔ)和過(guò)去分詞做狀語(yǔ)，：Nowadays, it is not rare to see a man walk on the sidewalks, smartphone in hand, completely absorbed in the digital world.，賓語(yǔ)從句 Just as what computers once achieved, smartphones are transforming our life in every possible way—how we socialize, entertain, and study.，定語(yǔ)從句 I contact friends by phone or QQ. But now I have switched to Wechat, a popular app that allows people to communicate and to share feelings and daily occurrence with friends.和不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句To stay informed, I constantly update my Wechat, for which I am often distracted.等，這些都成為文章的亮點(diǎn)所在。

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