Question

【題目】假如你是李華。你看到美國留學生Sharon在網上發(fā)貼，希望有人能幫助她提高普通話(Mandarin)水平，她可以教英語作為回報。請根據以下提示用英語給她寫一封電子郵件。

1．表達給她提供幫助的意愿；

2．說明你能勝任輔導的理由；

3．給出講好普通話的兩點建議；

4．提出你學習英語的具體需求。

注意：

1．詞數100左右，開頭語已為你寫好；

2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

Hi Sharon,

This is Li Hua. I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Hi Sharon,

This is Li Xia. I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin. I am quite interested in it. I think I’m fit for it. As a student, I have been learning Mandarin for many years. In addition, I am Chinese, which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in my daily life. So I’m quite confident that I can help you learn Mandarin.

Learning Mandarin takes time, so if you want to learn it well, you should spend much time practicing Mandarin everyday. As the saying goes, practice makes perfect. Besides, you can also read some books in Chinese、see some Chinese films and listen to some Chinese radio programmes. Speaking and listening are very important for a language learning, by which you are sure to make great progress.

In your post, you say you can teach English as a reward. It is just what I want. I’m eager to improve my English. So, if you allow me to help you learn Mandarin, you can also help me improve my English. We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour in English and half an hour in Chinese, so that we can improve our oral speaking.

Hope for your early reply!

Yours Sincerely

Li Xia

【解析】試題分析：考查提綱類作文。提綱作文在寫作時需要注意以下幾個方面：首先需要審題。即:審要求、審文體、審人稱、審時態(tài)。其次，考生要能夠抓中心，列要點，列出寫作提綱。寫作文時，一定要切題，抓住中心，緊扣要點。然后在體裁明確、中心突出、要點清晰的前提下，考生應該選擇自己最熟悉、最有把握的詞語、句型，將要點逐條表達出來。最后根據要點選詞組句，然后按照篇章結構連句成篇。本篇文章的要點具體，可分成三段寫，第一段寫要點1，2；第二段寫要點3；第三段寫要點4以及希望得到對方的回信。

【亮點說明】本文要點齊全，結構完整。使用多種句式，如定語從句：I am Chinese, which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in my daily life.表語從句：It is just what I want.等。We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour in English and half an hour in Chinese, so that we can improve our oral speaking. so that引導的結果狀語從句恰到好處；另外還使用了大量短語等。