Question

【題目】某國內英語雜志舉行征文大賽，要求參賽的高中學生介紹一件自己珍藏的物品（如書信、禮物、照片……）。請你用英文寫一篇字數(shù)為100-120的參賽稿，內容應包括：

1. 你得到這件物品的過程

2. 這件物品對于你的意義

注意: 文中不得以任何形式透露考生和學校等真實信息。

Answer 1

【答案】

Lying in my drawer is a delicate wooden toy ship. It was a gift from my grandfather when I was young. Grandpa was fond of making things by hand and kept improving his skills. Seeing that I was tired of school, my grandpa promised that he would make me a wooden toy ship if my grades got better. My great love for toy ships made it hard for me to refuse his offer. I agreed and the following weeks witnessed Grandpa’s constant efforts to perfect his gift.

I did a good job in the final exams. Naturally Grandpa kept his word and gave me the gift, which really looked like a real ship. “With great efforts, you can achieve whatever you want”. Whenever I see the toy ship, I will think of Grandpa’s words, giving me power to struggle on.

【解析】

試題分析：某國內英語雜志舉行征文大賽，要求參賽的高中學生介紹一件自己珍藏的物品（如書信、禮物、照片……）。請你用英文寫一篇字數(shù)為100-120的參賽稿，內容應包括：1. 你得到這件物品的過程。2. 這件物品對于你的意義。寫作時不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫同時要把所提示的點寫全，語句通順，同時要注意準確運用時態(tài)、語態(tài)、上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。根據(jù)句意適當使用并列連詞，同時也要合理運用高級詞匯和高級句子為文章增色添彩。注意: 文中不得以任何形式透露考生和學校等真實信息。注意: 文中不得以任何形式透露考生和學校等真實信息。

【亮點說明】Lying in my drawer is a delicate wooden toy ship.動名詞短語作主語；It was a gift from my grandfather when I was young.句中使用了時間狀語從句；Seeing that I was tired of school, my grandpa promised that he would make me a wooden toy ship if my grades got better.現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語、賓語從句和條件狀語從句的使用；My great love for toy ships made it hard for me to refuse his offer. It作形式主語，真正的主語是后面的動詞不定式短語；Naturally Grandpa kept his word and gave me the gift, which really looked like a real ship.運用了非限制性定語從句；With great efforts, you can achieve whatever you want句中whatever引導賓語從句；Whenever I see the toy ship, I will think of Grandpa’s words, giving me power to struggle on.讓步狀語從句和分詞作狀語完美結合。