Question

13．On a bright，warm July afternoon，Mac Hollan，a primary school teacher，was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends．One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair，but they had encouraged Mac to carry on，and they would catch up with him soon．As Mac pedaled （騎行） along alone，he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home．He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday．
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him．"Man，that's a big dog!"he thought．But when he looked to the side，he saw instantly that it wasn't a dog at all，but a wolf，quickly catching up with him．
Mac's heart jumped．He found out his can of hear spray．With one hand on the bars，he fired the spray at the wolf．A bright red cloud enveloped the animal，and to Mac's relief，it fell back，shaking its head．But a minute later，it was by his side again．Then it attacked the back of Mac's bike，tearing open his tent bag．He fired at the wolf a second time，and again，it fell back only to quickly restart the chase（追趕）．
Mac was pedaling hard now．He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down．He saw a steep uphill climb before him．He knew that  once he hit the hill，he'd be easy caught up and the wolf's teeth would be tearing into his flesh．
At this moment，Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska．They didn't think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road．A bit later，they spotted what they，too，assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike．As they got closer，they realized that the dog was a wolf．Mac heard a large vehicle behind him．He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast，just a dozen yards away now．
注意：
1．所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2．應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；
3．續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；
4．續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語．
      The car abruptly stopped in front of him．Paul shouted through the window，"Get in the car quickly!"Mac jumped off the bicycle andjumped into the back seat of the car without hesitation．（高分句型一） In the meanwile，the wolf caught up．Luckily，the car's door washard enough and Mac was safe．Beeky threw somefood out of the window and Paul pressed the button of the horn to make an alert．Finally，the wolf left and disappeared．"Oh my god，my friends are still repairing the bicycle!"shouted Mac．Without a second thought，Paul drove the car quickly back to find the two cyclists，only to find they were gone．（高分句型二）
      A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived．"Thank godness!Where did you go？"Mac held his two friends tightly in arms．"I'm happy to see you again，my friend．Inoticed a big dog running on the road when I was repairing my bike．And then we realized thatit was a wolf，so we kept hiding ourselves until it went away．""Oh，my god，without these two gentlemen's help，I would be the dinner of the wolf．"Finally，though tired，they continued their way and reached Alaska，safe and sound．（高分句型三） What an unforgettable experience they shared!．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于續(xù)寫故事．寫作時注意以下幾點：首先仔細閱讀原來故事的內(nèi)容．原來故事主要情節(jié)為：Mac Hollan在與朋友們騎自行車去阿拉斯加時，一位朋友停下來修自行車，他們鼓勵Mac一個人先騎走，說等會就會趕上來．Mac不幸遇到了一只狼，在逃生中，遇到了駕車的Paul和Beeky．Paul停車準備相助，故事戛然而止．
     結(jié)合所給的兩段內(nèi)容的開頭語可以判斷，接下來需要續(xù)寫Paul幫助Mac逃生的方法及過程．需要注意的是，本文描述的是已經(jīng)發(fā)生的故事，時態(tài)應該使用一般過去時．最后注意使用一些動詞和形容詞，穿插一些過渡性詞語，以使文章條理清晰，行文緊湊．同時注意書寫規(guī)范，盡量避免使用沒有把握的單詞和句子．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：without  hesitation毫不猶豫；In the meanwile同時；Without a second thought毫不遲疑；Finally，最后；safe and sound  平安無恙；
Mac jumped off the bicycle and jumped into the back seat of the car  without  hesitation．（高分句型一）
Without a second thought，Paul drove the car quickly back to find the two cyclists，only to find they were gone．（高分句型二）
Finally，though tired，they continued their way and reached Alaska，safe and sound．（高分句型三）

解答 Para1：The car abruptly stopped in front of him．Paul shouted through the window，"Get in the car quickly!"Mac jumped off the bicycle and jumped into the back seat of the car  without  hesitation．（高分句型一） In the meanwile，the wolf caught up．Luckily，the car's door was hard enough and Mac was safe．Beeky threw some food out of the window and Paul pressed the button of the horn to make an alert．Finally，the wolf left and disappeared．"Oh my god，my friends are still repairing the bicycle!"shouted Mac．Without a second thought，Paul drove the car quickly back to find the two cyclists，only to find they were gone．（高分句型二）
 Para2：A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived．"Thank godness!Where did you go？"Mac held his two friends tightly in arms．"I'm happy to see you again，my friend．I noticed a big dog running on the road when I was repairing my bike．And then we realized that it was a wolf，so we kept hiding ourselves until it went away．""Oh，my god，without these two gentlemen's help，I would be the dinner of the wolf．"Finally，though tired，they continued their way and reached Alaska，safe and sound．（高分句型三） What an unforgettable experience they shared!

點評 續(xù)寫時注意以下問題：
1．與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；
2．內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所給關(guān)鍵詞語的覆蓋情況；
3．應用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準確性；
4．上下文的連貫性．