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現(xiàn)在網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物已成為一種時(shí)尚，網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物有很多好處，但也有不少問題，請(qǐng)你談?wù)勀愕目捶ê徒ㄗh。字?jǐn)?shù)：120字左右
Online Shopping 

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Instead of going to physical stores, more and more people choose to go shopping o line. Actually, online shopping plays an essential role in our daily life owing to much convenience it brings us. furthermore, not only can it save money, but it also offers lots of stores and goods at the same time, which provides additional orderings option and convenience.
As each coin has two sides, online shopping isn’t exception. To begin with, we often receive the shirt with the wrong size, because we can try it by ourselves. Next, due to the low price online, we are likely to lose control and buy many useless things. what’s more, there are many swindlers who  cheat us by opening on fake online store.
In conclusion, as a new booming thing, online shopping does have some benefits, but its potential dangers can not be ignored. Only when we work together can online shopping have a better future.

試題分析：本文是議論文習(xí)作，沒有提供材料，要求學(xué)生必須把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前必需認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，議論目前的情況，要求讓學(xué)生寫對(duì)現(xiàn)在網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的看法和建議，因此本文必須用第三人稱。根據(jù)題目要求羅列出提綱要點(diǎn)：越來越多的人網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物，有好的一面，好的就是：1 網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物扮演著必要的角色；2 給我們帶來方便，3 不僅可以省錢還可對(duì)許多商店和產(chǎn)品進(jìn)行選擇。又有不好的一面：1 買的東西與想要的東西不符；2 由于低價(jià)我們可能買回一些無用的東西； 3 可能受騙；羅列提綱之后應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，一定用上一些連接詞，用一些高級(jí)詞匯以提高作文的檔次。然在書寫上，要干凈整潔的卷面與字?jǐn)?shù)要求，一般能達(dá)到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如instead of，more and more people，go shopping o line, plays an essential role in，owing to，To begin with，due to，In conclusion，等；還運(yùn)用了“not only can it save money, but it also offers lots of stores and goods at the same time, which provides additional orderings option and convenience.”中 not only ……but also……引導(dǎo)句子用部分倒裝，里面還運(yùn)用了which引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句；同時(shí)句子“there are many swindlers who  cheat us by opening on fake online store.”中有who引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句；because we can try it by ourselves.引導(dǎo)原因狀語(yǔ)從句；Only when we work together can online shopping have a better future.only+介詞短語(yǔ)或從句，句子謂語(yǔ)用部分倒裝等等。并注意了句子的銜接如： Actually； furthermore；As each coin has two sides, To begin with, Next, what’s more, In conclusion,等等。