Question

假設(shè)你是李華，是高一年級學(xué)生會主席，開學(xué)以來發(fā)現(xiàn)同學(xué)早餐時間，課間都在學(xué)校超市買方便面等垃圾食品作為早飯，并吃完后隨手扔得滿校園都垃圾袋，你為此很擔(dān)心。請你給校長寫信，希望早餐期間，課間關(guān)閉超市，同時提出自己建議。內(nèi)容提示：
寫信理由
1．垃圾食品含脂肪，糖太高，對身體有害；
2．垃圾食品會導(dǎo)致癌癥，心臟��；
3．塑料垃圾袋使得校園臟亂差。
你的建議
1. 早餐時間，課間關(guān)閉超市  2. 提倡學(xué)生養(yǎng)成良好的飲食習(xí)慣
注意：1．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使短文連貫、通順；
2．短文的開頭已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)；
Dear President,
I’m LiHua in Grade one. Recently, I have noticed most of students have bought junk food from supermarket in stead of breakfast. I really worry about it.

Answer 1

Dear President,
I’m LiHua in Grade one. Recently, I have noticed most of students have bought junk food from supermarket in stead of breakfast. I really worry about it.
As we all know, junk food, such as instant noodles and hamburgers, is high in fat and sugar. So eating too much junk food is bad for us students’ health. Even worse, it not only can make students overweight but also can lead to some diseases, such as heart disease and cancer. Last but not least, the packing bags thrown by students make our school dirty.
In my opinion, supermarket should be closed at breakfast time and between classes. Our school should appeal that students develop a good eating habit to make sure that they have a balanced diet.
I’m looking forward to receiving your reply.
Yours,
LiHua

解析試題分析：考查提綱類作文，要求寫一封建議信，要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，就課間都在學(xué)校超市買方便面等垃圾食品造成學(xué)校環(huán)境問題的情況，給校長寫一封信，同時提出自己建議。包括1．垃圾食品含脂肪，糖太高，對身體有害； 2．垃圾食品會導(dǎo)致癌癥，心臟病； 3．塑料垃圾袋使得校園臟亂差。審題時注意本文使用的時態(tài)，運(yùn)用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用省略句，倒裝句和強(qiáng)調(diào)句型準(zhǔn)確表述。如范文里面的As we all know, junk food, such as instant noodles and hamburgers, is high in fat and sugar.和 it not only can make students overweight but also can lead to some diseases,還有要用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞把文章串聯(lián)起來：象Even worse, Last but not least,等等。
考點(diǎn)：考查提綱類短文寫作。
點(diǎn)評：提綱類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時注意謀篇布局的順序，詞匯句型的選用，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時選擇高級的詞匯和語法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。