Question

假如你是李華，你打算明年作為交換生到美國(guó)Michigan University去學(xué)習(xí)。你從網(wǎng)上得知一家美國(guó)機(jī)構(gòu)提供寄宿家庭的信息。因此你給他們發(fā)一封電子郵件，郵件主要內(nèi)容
包括：
1你對(duì)房屋類(lèi)型及位置的要求；
2，要求免費(fèi)提供一些生活設(shè)施；
3．期望月租；
4期盼盡快回復(fù)。
注意.1.詞數(shù)l00左右；
2開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已寫(xiě)好，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
3可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
Dear Sir or Madam.
I'm going to study in Michigan University as an exchange student next year.
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam.
I'm going to study in Michigan University as an exchange student next year.
Having learned from your website that you provide accommodation information for overseas students, I’m writing to look for a suitable host family. My requirements are as follows:
First of all ,I’d like to have my own single room, which is comfortable for me to stay in. second，the flat should be in the centre of the city, where the traffic is convenient for me to go around. Third, I’d appreciate it if the host family could provide a washing machine and some essential equipment for free so that I can wash my clothes and cook my meals, Besides, the monthly rent should be no more than $300.
I’m looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是書(shū)信類(lèi)作文，你打算明年作為交換生到美國(guó)Michigan University去學(xué)習(xí)。要求給一家提供寄宿家庭信息的美國(guó)機(jī)構(gòu)發(fā)一封電子郵件，文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來(lái)了，而且很具體，考生要把要點(diǎn)解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來(lái)很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫(xiě)作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡(jiǎn)潔。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】所給范文語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔，應(yīng)用了一些較好的詞組和句子：as follows 如下，look forward to 盼望，no more than不多于， Having learned from your website that you provide accommodation information for overseas students, I’m writing to look for a suitable host family. 這句話(huà)用了現(xiàn)在分詞的完成式做狀語(yǔ)， I’d like to have my own single room, which is comfortable for me to stay in. second，the flat should be in the centre of the city, where the traffic is convenient for me to go around. 這里用了兩個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句， I’d appreciate it if the host family could provide a washing machine and some essential equipment for free so that I can wash my clothes and cook my meals,這句話(huà)用了it做形式賓語(yǔ)和結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句，還有因?yàn)橛昧薋irst of all ，second， Third, Besides, 這篇文章讀起來(lái)很順暢。