Question

3月5日是學(xué)雷鋒日。某英文報(bào)社為此舉辦一次征文比賽。請(qǐng)根據(jù)如下新聞報(bào)道及內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)提示寫一篇英文短文應(yīng)征。
新聞報(bào)道
3月5日當(dāng)天，不少志愿者“扎堆”到養(yǎng)老院獻(xiàn)愛(ài)心，以至于老人們被迫過(guò)度“享受”而倍感疲憊，令人尷尬不已。  
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：
1.簡(jiǎn)要描述新聞報(bào)道；
2.分析現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的可能原因；
3.個(gè)人看法。
注意：
1可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2.詞數(shù)120左右;
3.開(kāi)頭己給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
4.參考詞匯：雷鋒精神Lei Feng Spirit,養(yǎng)老院nursing  home。
Recently, an issue has come into public attention.
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Answer 1

Recently, an issue has come into public attention. As is reported in the newspaper, many volunteers rushed into nursing homes to help the elderly, which turned out to be more of a burden. Some senior citizens complained that they were badly exhausted by excessive voluntary service on such a single day.
From my point of view, there must be two reasons contributing to this phenomenon. In the first place, many volunteers flooded into nursing homes either in the true charitable spirit, i.e, Lei Feng spirit or at the request of their boss. Secondly, they must have gone for the nursing homes in the city-centre within easy reach.
The above embarrassing happening conveys to us that Lei Feng spirit is nothing but a routine way of action and calls for us to do a favor for the needy around us in a practical way.

試題分析：考查提綱作文：就現(xiàn)在人們“扎堆”到養(yǎng)老院獻(xiàn)愛(ài)心，以至于老人們被迫過(guò)度“享受”而倍感疲憊的事情，對(duì)這件事情分析原因和說(shuō)明個(gè)人的觀點(diǎn)，首先要仔細(xì)審題，包括以下幾個(gè)方面：（1）層次結(jié)構(gòu)，（2）句子的時(shí)態(tài)（3）內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)。尤其是內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，這是提綱作文，要點(diǎn)需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒?jí)句式和高級(jí)詞匯，以提高書(shū)面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。也要用一些適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】As is reported in the newspaper, many volunteers rushed into nursing homes to help the elderly, which turned out to be more of a burden.這句話有兩個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句， Some senior citizens complained that they were badly exhausted by excessive voluntary service on such a single day.這句話用額賓語(yǔ)從句， From my point of view, there must be two reasons contributing to this phenomenon. 這句話是現(xiàn)在分詞做定語(yǔ)， The above embarrassing happening conveys to us that Lei Feng spirit is nothing but a routine way of action and calls for us to do a favor for the needy around us in a practical way.這句話用了convey這樣的高級(jí)詞匯和短語(yǔ)nothing but，還有文章還使用了 In the first place, . Secondly,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫。