Question

【題目】Chen Yifan, the student from a local senior high school, hit a BMW car parking along the street when he was passing by on a bicycle on February 4, leaving the rearview mirror broken and several scratches over the body of the car.

Chen left a letter of apology to the car owner, together with an envelope of 311 yuan he had earned from part-time jobs during the winter holiday. He put them at the inside of a door handle.

The car owner surnamed Xue found the letter and cash the next day and got so touched by Chen’s honesty. With the help of local police Xue located the student on February 10 in the hope of returning the money. He told the police that he also wants to fund Chen’s education if the family cannot afford it.

On February 11, Chen’s mother, after knowing what her son had done, voluntarily contacted Xue trying to compensate for the repair of 13,000 yuan. But Xue turned her down firmly.

The next day, Xue’s daughter visited Chen’s family with a grant of 10,000 yuan for his education.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1. 用約30個(gè)單詞寫出上文概要；

2. 用約120個(gè)單詞發(fā)表你的觀點(diǎn)，內(nèi)容包括：

（1）如果你是那位中學(xué)生，你會(huì)怎么做？你又如何看待這位車主的行為？

（2）如何理解“窮有信、富而仁”這句話？

【寫作要求】

1. 寫作過程中不能直接引用原文語(yǔ)句；

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

3. 不必寫標(biāo)題。

【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

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Answer 1

【答案】Chen Yifan and his mom decided to pay all they could afford for compensation after Chen accidentally bumped into a parked BMW. Moved by his deed, the car owner declined and offered to sponsor Chen’s education.

Chen has really set a good example to our fellow Chinese students. Though he could have left the scene unpunished, he decided to shoulder the cost of repairs. Meanwhile, that car driver Xue didn’t pale in comparison with the boy. Contrary to the common reaction when their cars get scratched, Xue displayed a high degree of tolerance and compassion, which contribute to the harmony of the story.

As far as I am concerned, such harmonious relationship between them shows great advances in social morality. Despite the difference in wealth, the inferior should always put honesty in the first place, and those who enjoy a better life should show more empathy with the inferior.

【解析】讀寫任務(wù)型寫作分為兩部分：

第一部分要求用約30個(gè)詞概括所給短文的要點(diǎn)，文體主要以議論文，記敘文或說明文為主。

第二部分以約120個(gè)詞就短文某一主題談?wù)撟约旱慕?jīng)歷并發(fā)表看法。此項(xiàng)旨在著重考查學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)的綜合能力，特別是閱讀寫作以及思維的能力。

我們就第一部分，具體談一下解題步驟。

第一部分要求學(xué)生能讀懂文章，在讀懂的基礎(chǔ)上概括文章要點(diǎn)，所以閱讀能力和概括能力要求較高。

本文是故事性閱讀材料，寫文章概要的時(shí)候,應(yīng)該用最簡(jiǎn)練的語(yǔ)言來說明故事講述了什么，還可以講述該故事給你的啟示(inspiration) 或其中的一個(gè)道理(principle)。主要內(nèi)容一般應(yīng)包括四個(gè)方面：

1. 什么人？(Who)

2. 發(fā)生什么事情？(What happened)

3. 目的如何/原因是什么/方式怎樣？(Why/How)

4. 結(jié)果如何/什么啟示或教訓(xùn)？(Consequence/Inspiration/Lesson)

在這幾個(gè)方面中，所占內(nèi)容比重最大的是what，考生最容易犯的錯(cuò)誤就是把what寫得太詳細(xì)。當(dāng)然，不是說每個(gè)故事概要都包含how或why，有時(shí)兩者選其一即可。

所以，就本文第一部分要求，我們可以簡(jiǎn)單列出如下四要素，然后找出文章中的要點(diǎn)：

1. Who—Chen Yifan and his mom

2. What happened—decided to pay for compensation

3. Why—Chen accidentally bumped into a parked BMW

4. Result—the car owner declined and offered to sponsor Chen’s education

列出了要點(diǎn)之后，我們就可以用自己的話將要點(diǎn)組織起來，概括成一段通順文段了。

【本文亮點(diǎn)】寫作內(nèi)容1：本文僅用兩句話便將人物、事件、起因和結(jié)果表述的非常簡(jiǎn)潔清楚。第一句用了帶有時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的復(fù)合句，交代了事件的起因。第二句是一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句，此處用一個(gè)過去分詞短語(yǔ)moved by his deed作原因狀語(yǔ)，惜字如金，用的巧妙。全文共36個(gè)字，符合題目要求。

寫作內(nèi)容2：文章開門見山，Chen has really set a good example to our fellow Chinese students，點(diǎn)題到位。句式長(zhǎng)短錯(cuò)落，并列句、狀語(yǔ)從句和定語(yǔ)從句的使用恰如其分，表意清晰。Though, meanwhile, contrary to, as far as I am concerned, despite…等詞的使用，使文章十分緊湊而有條理，內(nèi)容完整，字?jǐn)?shù)恰當(dāng)，是一篇好文。