Question

I was brought up in the countryside by my grandmother. She was a very courageous and inspiring woman and was very beautiful, too. In comparison with her or some of my classmates, I always felt that I was not beautiful or pretty. In fact, when I was studying in middle school, I thought I was not beautiful and just because of these bad feelings I was not very confident. I often felt self-conscious. One day when I was walking with my grandmother after lunch, we met one of her friends. We talked for a few minutes. Just as my grandmother’s friend was about to leave, she turned to me and praised, “Xiao Wen, you look so beautiful today in that green dress.”

No one had ever praised me before. It was so encouraging. Suddenly I felt confident and happy. I couldn’t believe that someone described me as beautiful. It is true that those words turned my life around. And I admit that I treasured that green dress for a long time.

「寫作內容」

1） 以約30個詞概括短文的要點；

2） 然后以約120個詞，就表揚(praise)或稱贊發(fā)表看法，需包括以下要點：

a） 你看完作者的經歷的感受。

b） 敘述你或你的朋友被老師表揚或其他人被表揚的一次真實或虛構的經歷；

c） 這次稱贊、表揚帶來的最終影響。

「寫作要求」

1） 可以參照閱讀材料的篇章結構，組織故事，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2） 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。

Answer 1

The writer was once praised by one of her grandmother’s friends for her beautiful green dress. This praise not only made her happy but also changed her attitude towards herself.

From what the author had experience, I truly feel that praise is really magical.

Compared with criticism, praise can often give people pleasure and make them more confident to try out their potential. We should always bear in mind that everyone needs encouragement and approval.

Perhaps many of us had such experience of being appreciated of praise. Take myself as an example. I was very naughty in the primary school. Most of the teachers and even my parents felt headache of me. But it happened that I once got a very high mark in an examination and the head teacher told my parents about this. My parents praised me crazily for this for quite a long time and told neighbors about that. I felt really happy and became polite to others. Every time when I heard others talk to me about my excellent examination result, I thought to myself that I would work even harder and made greater progress.

Just as Shakespeare said，“Our praises are our wages”.

【解析】這是一篇議論文寫作。首先要把短文的大概內容概括出來，然后要圍繞短文的主旨發(fā)表自己的看法。要注意把要求2的寫作要點都寫出來。第一段第二句使用了not only ……but also，把兩個單句變成一句，使得句子既簡潔又全面。”From what the author had experience”使用了倒裝句，把what提前。用compared with開頭，讓人感覺眼前一亮。在使用從句方面。第三段中“it happened that I once got a very high mark in an examination and the head teacher told my parents about this.”使用了主語從句，it作為形式主語，而真正的主語放在后面.“Every time when I heard others talk to me about my excellent examination result,” 使用了when引導的時間狀語從句，表示“當……的時候”，在詞語的使用方面“Take myself as an example”take……as，把……當做；“even my parents felt headache of me”feel headache of，對……感到頭痛。最后引用了名人名言，給文章留下了一個完美的結尾，也顯示出作者優(yōu)秀的作文功底。總結：寫作時，多使用高級詞匯和從句能為文章增色不少，同時適當的引用英文諺語更是錦上添花。

考點：考查議論文寫作。