Question

假如你是李華，現(xiàn)在上高一，你的叔叔現(xiàn)在在美國工作，你覺得父母管得太嚴(yán)，自己解決不了這個(gè)問題，于是發(fā)郵件給叔叔，希望他跟你父母談?wù)�，勸說他們改變教育方式，要點(diǎn)如下：

1.學(xué)習(xí)上要求太高，自己達(dá)不到他們的期望值，并經(jīng)常拿自己和鄰居家孩子比，讓自己很沮喪；

2.不準(zhǔn)看電視、上網(wǎng)；

3.不準(zhǔn)自己和女生交朋友；

4.覺得跟父母有代溝(generation gap)，不能很好地溝通。

注意：

1.可以適當(dāng)增減細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

2.字?jǐn)?shù)120左右；

3.開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù).

Dear Uncle,

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Best wishes,

Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Uncle,

How are you these days? I’m writing to tell you my trouble with my parents.

In my opinion, my parents are too strict with me. They expect too much of me but I really can’t live up to their expectations. Besides, they often compare me with my neighbor who is considered better, which makes me rather depressed. And they even don’t allow me to watch TV or surf the Internet because they think it’s a waste of time. What’s more, I can’t make friends with girls because it may influence my study. In one word, I feel that there is a wide generation gap between us, and therefore we can’t communicate with each other freely.

Till now I haven’t found a good solution to these problems. I would be grateful if you could do me a favor to talk to my parents and persuade them to change the way of education. I’m looking forward to your reply.

Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：題目要求給在美國的叔叔寫郵件，請(qǐng)叔叔勸父母改變教育方式。寫作要點(diǎn)包括：學(xué)習(xí)上要求過高；不準(zhǔn)看電視、上網(wǎng)；不準(zhǔn)與異性交朋友；不能跟父母很好地溝通等方面，詞數(shù)在120詞左右，開頭饑餓結(jié)尾不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；不要出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫錯(cuò)誤，盡量保持卷面整潔、字體美觀；注意行文的連貫性。

亮點(diǎn)說明：

范文使用了定語從句①who is considered better，②which makes me rather depressed；原因狀語從句①because they think it’s a waste of time，②because it may influence my study；賓語從句think it’s a waste of time；表語從句that there is a wide generation gap between us；條件句if you could do me a favor等語法知識(shí)，使作文句式多樣，在表達(dá)上更加具有生動(dòng)性；

范文注意使用In my opinion, but, Besides, And, What’s more, In one word, and therefore, Till now等詞銜接句子和段落，使作文語意連貫、連接緊密；

范文使用了較多的短語和搭配：be strict with, live up to, compare sb with, allow sb to do, make friends with, communicate with, a solution to..., talk to, persuade sb to do, the way of, look forward to...等，使作文內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)，有說服力。

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