Question

假設(shè)你是高中生李明, 因為老師擔(dān)心同學(xué)們?yōu)g覽不健康的網(wǎng)站，學(xué)校關(guān)閉了電腦教室的上網(wǎng)功能，同學(xué)們感到很郁悶。請你給校長寫一封建議信。內(nèi)容包括：

1. 無法上網(wǎng)給學(xué)生帶來的不便；

2. 網(wǎng)絡(luò)的必要性（幫助解決學(xué)習(xí)難題、獲取最新信息；）

3. 就老師的擔(dān)心發(fā)表你的看法。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)120左右；

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 信的開頭和結(jié)尾部分已經(jīng)給出， 不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear headmaster,

I’m writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom.___________________________________________________________________

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Yours,

Li Ming

Answer 1

Dear headmaster,

I’m writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom. Right now, we cannot use the computer in the computer classroom to get on line, which makes us very upset because we can’t search for the information we need or read news.

As far as I am concerned, surfing the Internet can benefit us in many ways. First of all, we can search for answers to some problems that we come across in our studies. Second, it is necessary for us to learn about the latest news. More importantly, we are no longer children now, so we are able to control our behavior. I promise we won’t visit unhealthy websites.

I do hope you can take my suggestion into consideration and make a final decision.

Yours,

Li Ming

【解析】該作文要求給校長寫建議信，這就要求考生在反映出需要表達(dá)的事情的同時，注意語言的使用，要盡量的禮貌和正式。注意條理要清晰，邏輯順序和結(jié)構(gòu)要恰當(dāng)，同時要盡量保持簡潔精干的內(nèi)容，不拖泥帶水。要注意題中所給的信息，不可偏題，應(yīng)用文寫作對于文章內(nèi)容的要求是要達(dá)到寫作目的。盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時。使用一些高級句型和詞匯提升作文檔次�！玖咙c說明】第一句I’m writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom. 其中request用的很得當(dāng)，比require正式并且Request表示“懇求，請求”時，則指通過正式手續(xù)提出的要求，口氣和緩，態(tài)度禮貌。第二句用了一個非限制性定語從句Right now, we cannot use the computer in the computer classroom to get on line, which makes us very upset 現(xiàn)在，我們不能使用電腦教室的電腦上網(wǎng)了，這件事讓我們非常郁悶。Which代指前面整個句子做主語。文章的條理性主要集中在第二段先用了As far as I am concerned, 開頭，引出觀點 First of all、 Second、 More importantly層次鮮明第二段第二句使用了一個定語從句we can search for answers to some problems that we come across in our studies.我們可以搜索那些我們在學(xué)習(xí)上遇到的難題的答案。第二段中比較好的短語：come across遇到、it is necessary for us to這對我們來說很有必要去做……、no longer 不再、are able to能做。在文中最后一段，I do hope you can take my suggestion into consideration and make a final decision.我真誠希望你能考慮我的建議，做出最后決定。Do在句子中間起強調(diào)作用，表現(xiàn)出同學(xué)們的渴望，take…into consideration將…納入考慮。整篇文章，禮貌不失條理，很好的講自己要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容傳達(dá)了出去。

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